Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Few individuals narrate that the main environmental issue in this contemporary society is the loss of particular plants and animals .Opponents say that there are numerous significant environmental problems .This has become a very heated argument in this contemporary society . Which one is the real threat to society this be discussed in this essay . In the conclusion my perspective would be written .

Oxygen is very essential for human life on earth without oxygen we cannot life .Few people says that a lot species of plants that was helping to maintain the percentage of oxygen in air are now gone in addition most of animals they eat harmful insects which was in favor of farmers the reason to that is these insects usual diet is crop . These animals are also rapidly decreasing . That is why few people say that main envoirmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animal.

Opponents says that there are more crucial problems .

They say this is happening beacouse of deforestation.

When individuals cut down trees more than necessary humans are not only losing there main source of oxygen they are destroying houses of many animals

Birds . These animals are providing their services without any charges and humans are destroying their houses .

My perspective is that the main cause of environmental problems is not loss of species and plants its because of deforestation .Deforestation is why we are loosing plants and animal .On earth every single living organism is with a purpose destroying in addition to this is that nature cannot be changed . Humans should not mess with nature because there are consequences that humans cannot face

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding the importance of species loss and the counter-argument about deforestation are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. The essay would benefit from more specific examples and a clearer explanation of why one issue might be considered more 'important' than the other. The position is stated but not fully explored or supported with sophisticated reasoning, which limits the score to a 5.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are frequently missing or mechanical (e.g., 'Opponents says that there are more crucial problems'). The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas feels disjointed. While there is a basic attempt at paragraphing, the lack of effective linking words makes the text difficult to follow at times. Improved use of transition signals would significantly enhance the coherence of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on simple, everyday language. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'narrate' instead of 'argue' or 'state', and 'usual diet' instead of 'natural diet'. Spelling errors, such as 'envoirmental', 'beacouse', and 'loosing', are present throughout the text. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of range and the frequency of errors in word choice and spelling prevent a higher score. Expanding the vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terms is essential.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'Few people says', 'Opponents says') and incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'cannot life'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before periods and erratic capitalization. While some complex structures are attempted, they are often faulty or unclear. The high frequency of errors, particularly in basic grammar, occasionally impedes the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips.

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