Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The below given information illustrates the problem of environment. Some people is arguing now a days many species of animals and plants are lost because of pollution and not taking care of nature. Some people also discussing that there were more important nature problems rather then loosing species of animals and plant.

On the one hand, people are talking about losing animals and trees is important problem and it effect on the nature and also create environmental problems. On the other hand, Many people is discussing that there are more important environmental problems. We will discuss both the point of view in upcoming paragraph.

In our country there were many industries and manufacturing company and they make pollution in big amount which is very danger for our nature and it effect on animals and plants. This is also a big reason of losing species in our country. It also affect on environmental problem. For example; In industrial area there were no plants and animals because of highly acidic air and poison in water. In that area there no plants growing and on animals can survive.

People also argue about other problems rather then plants and animals. They are talking about major problem in environment and that is also important to discuss about other problems like weather, nature and pollution. For example. many problems were there and rather then losing species of animals and plants.

In conclusion, we should take major steps to stop problems in environment. Like we should stop using acidic air in agriculture area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views, but the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While you mention the loss of species and other environmental issues, the arguments lack depth and specific supporting evidence. The opinion is not clearly stated or consistently maintained throughout the essay. To improve, ensure each body paragraph provides a clear, distinct argument supported by a concrete example or logical explanation. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively summarize the main points or provide a final, well-articulated stance on the issue.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion', but these are used mechanically. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of your argument. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion is abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying on simple terms like 'problem', 'nature', and 'important'. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'make pollution in big amount' instead of 'generate significant pollution' and 'danger for our nature' instead of 'harmful to the environment'. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the lack of precision and frequent errors in collocation limit your score. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms and collocations relevant to environmental topics, and pay closer attention to word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Some people is arguing', 'Many people is discussing'), incorrect verb tenses ('there were many industries'), and article usage. The sentence structures are predominantly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'rather then loosing species' (should be 'rather than losing'). To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage. Proofreading for common errors like 'there is/are' and 'than/then' will significantly improve the clarity of your writing.

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