Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals which is true somehow . Plants and animals loss their life and effect their growth . For example if there is pollutant coming out of factory waste it effect animals badly as they drink water and their body and health effect same in case of plants if dirty water being given to plants it will effect growth plants can't grow properly don't able to make food . Eating food from those plants effect human body too . Animals and plants are important factor of our environment . If they can't live food , make food how people survive . Pollutant in their body cause serious health issues. People should consider this issue However, there is also many important environmental problems then these like people say biggest of them is health problems environment causing and some life risk . For example, dirty water cause dengue which is harmful for people . In some cases it leads people to death . Maleria cause health risks to children some new born babies die through it . Another biggest problem is batteries and trees burn it cause injuries and effect people breath . For example if person have batteries at home and they burn it affect their breath and cause injuries . Make difficulty to breath these things also should taken consider .Both thing are on their basis but we should not only see once should see both for better environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views regarding environmental problems, but the development is limited. While you mention the loss of species and other issues like pollution and health risks, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. The position is somewhat unclear, as the conclusion does not explicitly state your own opinion, merely suggesting that we should look at both sides. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and provides more detailed, logical explanations rather than listing examples that are not fully connected to the main point.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks a clear structure. It is written as two long, dense paragraphs that do not effectively separate the two viewpoints. There is a lack of cohesive devices (such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast') to guide the reader through your arguments. The progression of ideas is often disjointed, making it difficult to follow the logic. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for each main idea and employ transition words to link your sentences and paragraphs together more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use simple words like 'effect' (often used incorrectly as a verb instead of 'affect'), 'problem', and 'things'. There is little evidence of less common vocabulary or precise collocations. Many phrases are awkward, such as 'plants and animals loss their life'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more academic vocabulary related to the environment, such as 'biodiversity', 'ecosystem', 'hazardous waste', or 'mitigation strategies', and ensure you use words in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'dirty water cause dengue'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'don't able to make food'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and using correct verb tenses consistently.

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