Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
People have different opinions on whether students should learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. While some argue that it is more important to focus on studying for a qualification. I believe that learning diffenrent fields in university is more reasonable because in this way gives students more chances in the future.
On the one hand, it is ture that focusing on one subjects has certain merits. Firstly, giving more attention to studying for a qualification improves the rate of gratuation. For instances, part of students have no efforts to totally absorb knowledge at same time, then they may fail their own study, and can not graduate. However,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
这篇文章完全没有回应题目要求。学生写的是关于大学科目的文章，而不是关于物种灭绝的环境议题。此外，文章篇幅严重不足，仅有 111 字，未达到 250 字的最低要求。由于文章跑题且不完整，它未能针对实际任务表明立场或展开任何相关观点。因此，它无法被评估为对所给题目的成功回应。
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
文中表现出了基础的分段尝试，包含引言和一个不完整的主体段落。然而，由于内容与任务无关，文章缺乏逻辑推进。衔接词的使用非常有限且机械，例如 'On the one hand' 和 'Firstly'，但由于主题错误，这些词并未起到连接相关观点的作用。文章的突然结尾进一步破坏了写作的流畅性和连贯性。
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
词汇量非常有限且重复。文中存在多处拼写错误，例如将 'different' 拼写为 'diffenrent'，将 'true' 拼写为 'ture'，以及将 'graduation' 拼写为 'gratuation'。词汇范围不足以讨论复杂的环境问题，且用词较为基础。由于词汇限制和频繁的不准确性，学生难以清晰表达观点，这有时会阻碍读者理解其意图。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
语法结构非常受限，主要由简单句构成。基础语法频繁出错，例如 'part of students have no efforts to totally absorb knowledge'，这在句法上是不正确的。标点符号也存在问题，例如出现了 'While some argue that it is more important to focus on studying for a qualification.' 这样的句子碎片，而此处本应使用完整句子。这些错误频繁出现，往往会给读者造成理解困难。
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