Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Environment plays a vital role in the planet. It helps to maintain environment fresh and clear. Some people argue that environment problem can loss the some species of plants and animals, while others argue that it is vital environmental challenges. This essay will explain both the view of environmental problems.
On the one hand, ecosystem problem in todays very common across all the nations. The government cut the tress for development and better infrastructures due to this many animals are extinct. The population in the world day by day increasing rapidly due to this fewer space at the city and country side. So, the higher authorities is deforestation for development of the nation. It reduces the number of species plants and animals. Biodiversity is essential for ecosystem balance. Plants and animals depend on each other. For example, bees are declining which reduces pollution and affects crop production.
On the other hand, other environmental problems are more important. Firstly, climate change affects the whole planet. Secondly, excessive use of vehicles and industry revolutions may reduces toxic gases on the surroundings. It creates air pollution causes diseases. Day by day sea-level rise due to global warming and it effects on temperature. People face many heatwaves during summer season due to carbon dioxide. Moreover, water pollution kills fish and marine animals and plastic waste damages oceans. For instance, heatwaves and floods are becoming more frequent because climate changes in many countries.
In conclusion, I believe environmental problem is loss of particular species of trees and animals due to biodiversity and rising temperature. Although, pollution causes diagnosis and many health illness. People struggling to breath nature air.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views regarding environmental problems, specifically the loss of species versus broader issues like climate change. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention deforestation and pollution, the arguments lack depth and specific, well-explained examples. Your own opinion is stated in the conclusion, but it is not clearly integrated or supported throughout the essay. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph provides a clear, logical progression of ideas that directly supports your stance, rather than simply listing environmental issues. The conclusion should also clearly summarise your position rather than introducing new, slightly confusing phrasing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'due to this' used repeatedly to start sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. For example, the transition between the discussion of species loss and the broader environmental problems lacks a smooth logical bridge. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher score. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'environment problem can loss the some species' and 'industry revolutions may reduces toxic gases'. Additionally, the phrase 'causes diagnosis' is used incorrectly in the conclusion. To improve, focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and avoid repeating basic terms like 'environment' and 'problems'. Expanding your range to include more academic and topic-specific vocabulary will significantly enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('the higher authorities is deforestation'), incorrect verb forms ('may reduces'), and missing articles. Punctuation is generally functional, but sentence construction is often repetitive. To improve, pay closer attention to basic grammatical rules, particularly verb tenses and pluralisation. Attempting more complex sentence structures is good, but ensure they are grammatically sound before moving on to more advanced forms.
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