Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Since past many decades there is several changes in environment, some people says that it is due to lost of particular distinct species of plants and animals like a lions, whales and vegetables production. However, other people says that there are many significant environmental problems like AQI, water pollution and plastic pollution.

On the one hand, there are many unique species which is getting distinct from a earth because of pollutions and change in ecosystem. For example, an exotic animal Lion that are getting reduce by 30% it is important to preserve them. The should be should be use of lab where science help to produce and make birth. There should be champaiges which spread awareness to save the plants and animals, adding to it government should take strict action on killing animals and cutting the forest.

On the other hand, there are so much increase in different pollution that will be thread to humans in future. For example, the state Delhi has been most worst Air Quality Index (AQI) in India and because of that people are suffering from heart disease. There is increase in plastic use like polythenes and that why people should use recycle products. Since many years there is increase in water pollution because of sending industrial waste and dumping waste and many aquatic animals are suffering and getting died.

In conclusion, saveing particular species in plants and animal is important for earth but there are many other major reasons of environment which cause human health.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, though the development of ideas is somewhat limited. The arguments regarding species loss and other environmental issues are relevant but lack depth and specific, well-explained examples. For instance, the mention of 'lab where science help to produce' is vague and lacks clarity. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments rely on general statements rather than fully extended points. To improve, you should focus on explaining the 'why' and 'how' behind your arguments, ensuring that each point is logically connected to the prompt's core question about the relative importance of these environmental problems.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Since past many decades' and 'adding to it' are used in ways that do not always flow naturally. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the connection between the loss of species and the proposed solutions is disjointed. While there is a logical progression from one viewpoint to the other, the transitions between sentences and ideas need to be smoother and more varied to achieve a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'getting distinct from a earth', 'vegetables production', and 'most worst'. The repetition of basic terms like 'pollution' and 'increase' limits the range. To improve, you should work on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that words are used in their correct context. Expanding your range of synonyms and learning common collocations related to environmental topics will significantly enhance your lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('some people says'), incorrect article usage ('a earth', 'a lions'), and awkward phrasing ('there is several changes'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma splices. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction, tense consistency, and proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.

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