Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some individual believe that the main environmental problem of their time is the loss of some plants species and animals. While the remaining says that there are more crucial environmental issues. I believe that are main issues are not only loss of plants and animals species.

In such way, I think the main reason behind surrounding problems are the pollution of now a days. As we are seeing that technology growing with time and industrialization is increasing. Industrialization has a huge impact on the environment. The exhaust gasses effecting the ecosystem very badly.

However, the another cause of habitats problems is raising the use of fuel vehicles. As the mobiles increasing with time it also effect the ecosystem. The exhaust of the petrol or diesel vehicles is very harmful for the surrounding.

additionally, I agree with the people who trust that the deforestation and decreasing of animals species is cause of climate changes. The plant play a vital rule in our ecosystem. Trees provide us oxygen and absorb the harmful gasses it self.

As we know we can't decrease the industries and technology growing, and the need are surging new high. While Vehicles is also significance for the people and without this life is like impossible. So to reduce the impact of these things we need to do plantation more and more. And also stop deforestation. The government should take a strict action against the people who doing deforestation.

In conclusion, Overall the above discussion illustrate that the deforestation and loss of animals is not the only reason the effect the surrounding. There is also some more factors that have huge impact on environment. Like Industrialization, Vehicles, Pollution and many more.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development is inconsistent. While you mention industrialization and pollution as alternative problems, the connection between these and the loss of species is not fully explored. The argument remains somewhat superficial, and the position is not clearly sustained throughout the essay. For example, the conclusion introduces new ideas like 'pollution' and 'vehicles' rather than synthesizing the arguments presented. To improve, ensure that each paragraph directly supports your central thesis and provides more depth in your reasoning rather than listing multiple issues without detailed explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often hindered by awkward phrasing and limited use of cohesive devices. While you use transition words like 'However' and 'Additionally', they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. For instance, the transition 'In such way' at the start of the second paragraph does not logically connect to the previous sentence. The referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help create a smoother, more coherent essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'exhaust gasses effecting' (should be 'affecting'), 'raising the use of fuel vehicles', and 'the need are surging new high'. These errors occasionally cause the reader to pause. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical form and context, rather than relying on basic or repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('the need are surging', 'Vehicles is also significance'), article usage, and incorrect verb forms ('people who doing deforestation'). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors demonstrate a lack of control over complex structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately. Proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency will significantly improve your score.

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