Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The environment problems is lead to not single reason it include many reasons . The reason is that cutting of particular species of plant because cutting of trees oxygen production is decrease . We know that the trees are biggest oxygen producing factories and absorbing carbon dioxide and absorbs pollution to clean the environment .The other reason is that ozone depletion the ozone barrier of layer that stop harm full rays coming from sun as our air conditioner or refrigerator release chlrofloro carbon which deplete the ozone as ozone hole which leads to global warming or acid rain to soil errsion and increase the risk of floods . As high temperature glaciers melting to fast lead to heavy rain . The third reason extinction of particular species of animals in environment . In 2010 the temperature of our environment is about 40 c but now the temperature is about 46 c everyear 0.5 centigrade temperature is rise due following reasons as . We should keep our temperature kept low growing large numbers of plants and low consumption of fuel so we kept the temperature as low . We control the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 190 words. Furthermore, the essay does not adequately address the prompt. While it touches upon environmental issues, it fails to discuss both views (the loss of species versus other environmental problems) in a balanced way. The student does not clearly state an opinion, and the arguments provided are disjointed and lack development. The essay ends abruptly mid-sentence, indicating an incomplete response. To improve, the student must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed, provide a clear thesis statement, and develop each argument with supporting evidence and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the ideas are presented as a list of points rather than a cohesive argument. Paragraphing is absent, which makes the text difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'The reason is' and 'The other reason is'. The progression of ideas is not logical, and the abrupt ending further disrupts the flow of the text. To improve, the student should use clear paragraphing for each main idea and employ a wider range of linking words to connect sentences and paragraphs effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'chlrofloro carbon' (chlorofluorocarbons), 'errsion' (erosion), and 'everyear' (every year). The student struggles to use precise terminology related to environmental science, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas. To improve, the student should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary and ensuring correct spelling. Expanding the range of adjectives and verbs used to describe environmental changes would also help to elevate the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The environment problems is lead to'), sentence structure (e.g., 'The reason is that cutting of particular species of plant because cutting of trees oxygen production is decrease'), and punctuation. The response consists mostly of simple sentences with errors in basic syntax. There is a lack of complex structures, and the misuse of articles and prepositions is pervasive. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common grammatical slips.

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