Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is often argued that several people believe loss of specific species of plants and animals has become an increasingly prominent issue of an environmental damage. On the other hand, many individuals say that other factors also contribute in an environmental damage then one specific factor. This essay will address both views before presenting my opinion.

On one hand, particular types of plants and animals are plays a crucial role in environmental hazards. For example, Plants are used in herbal medicines, treatment purposes, and also use as a source of eating. So, cutting trees to free up space for construction of malls, shopping centers, and bungalows to give city a modern look and adjust more population may affects environmental damage. For instance, pollution increases rapidly and also affects on oxygen level which is key component of human being survival. Secondly, moving few animals in zoo and transfer them to other cities are other contributing factor. Such as eradicates of dinosaur, and other small species which are very beneficial for constructing household things such as the feathers of animals are used for making jackets, blankets and many other things. Furthermore, some species of animals are used in medicines as a effective health treatment.

On the other hand, not only cutting plants and removing animals from the country plays major role but also there are other contributing factors such as, not enough sources of food for citizens, Secondly, solar plates are now install in every home which cause an increase in temperature and people die because of heat stroke. Moreover, establishing more factories on city side and an increasing in number of vehicles create noise and air pollution which also another reason of destroy environment.

In conclusion, there are many factors that collectively contribute in environmental damage. such as establishing solar plates, cutting of plants, and other factors which affect people health and cause environment dangerous.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention the importance of species, the arguments regarding 'dinosaurs' and 'feathers for jackets' are not relevant to modern environmental conservation. The second body paragraph attempts to discuss other environmental problems, but the points about 'solar plates' causing heat stroke are factually confusing and lack logical support. To improve, ensure your arguments are grounded in realistic environmental science and provide clear, logical explanations for your claims. Your position is stated in the introduction but remains somewhat vague throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. For example, the transition 'Secondly, moving few animals in zoo' is abrupt and does not connect well to the previous point. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the use of linking words is mechanical. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically from the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'environmental hazards' (when you mean environmental damage) and 'eradicates of dinosaur' (which is grammatically and semantically incorrect). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use more sophisticated terms accurately. To improve, try to learn collocations in context—for example, instead of 'destroy environment', use 'degrade the environment' or 'ecological destruction'. Expanding your range of academic vocabulary will help you express your ideas with greater precision and clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'plants and animals are plays', 'solar plates are now install'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which makes the text difficult to follow. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles ('the' environment) and incorrect verb forms will significantly improve your score.

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