Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
in this paragraph we will talk about to environmental and problem of our time is the loos of particular species of plants and animals today will discuss about this paragraph and I will give you ky opinion.
today we face both problem environmental problem and time loos because all of them were very busy in our life we don't have any time to protect environmental and save animals life we are busy in our life for study for work and most of the time in mobile phone we teach our children and young youth in schools and colleges to protect the environment and teach how to grow plants and how to manage trees and we teach no to use the mobile soo much its dangerous for our health we grow planting instead of using of mobile phone. For Example: Grwoing the plants and trees is very beneficial for our health and also for animals.
And the people who says more important environment problem sp its fine because the best environment help to change our children mind and youth mind we should make the best environment for us and also for animals it's taking time but if everyone stand together and taking time and help each other so it is very easy and not time taking its very beneficial for human health and for animals. we help each other and e also take care of animals.
For Example:if we help each other and we everyone making the environment problem solving so its not taking to much time and also its not difficult for us.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the core of the prompt. While it mentions environmental problems, it does not engage with the specific debate regarding the loss of species versus other environmental issues. The ideas are repetitive and lack depth, focusing on general lifestyle habits like mobile phone usage rather than the environmental topic. The position is unclear, and the arguments are not developed in a way that answers the prompt's requirement to discuss both views. The essay reads more like a general reflection than a structured academic argument.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is ineffective, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs, making the text difficult to follow. The repetition of phrases like 'we are busy in our life' and 'help each other' creates a circular flow rather than a linear argument. The introduction is informal and does not clearly outline the essay's purpose, and the conclusion is missing entirely.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'time loos' instead of 'loss of time' and 'grwoing' (spelling error). The range of vocabulary is insufficient for an academic task, relying on basic, everyday language that does not demonstrate the ability to discuss environmental issues with precision or variety.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the basic sentences used are often punctuated incorrectly, such as run-on sentences and missing capitalization. Subject-verb agreement issues are common, for example, 'the people who says' instead of 'the people who say'. The misuse of articles and prepositions is pervasive, making the text difficult to read and understand at times.
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