Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

environmental natural is essential relationships between humans, with increase the population in the world, people believe that increase environmental problem are clearing, and may be affect us, plants and animals. on the other hands, citizens believe that the environmental problems are not crucial recently, and there are most important than them.

natural life book emphases that the increased number people in the world, without focus to another life as plants and animals, lose their balance. there is one researcher, his name Mohammed Salim consider that each there are relationships strongly between human, animal and plants, if lose one of them, may lose equip the life. what is mean that, for instance, plants during metabolic process, carbon toxoid, to produced oxygen, as it needed to humans and animal. at the same time, the plants are food for humans and animals. To improve the palnt

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 143 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely limited. While the essay attempts to address both views, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth and supporting examples required for an academic task. The position is not clearly articulated or maintained throughout the response. Due to the significant under-length and the lack of a clear conclusion or comprehensive discussion, the response cannot be awarded a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the awkward transition 'what is mean that'. The lack of a clear introduction, body, and conclusion makes the overall structure ineffective. The flow of information is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and unclear phrasing, which hinders the reader's ability to follow the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'clearing' instead of 'increasing' or 'critical', and 'carbon toxoid' instead of 'carbon dioxide'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology related to environmental issues, relying on basic and often misused words. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning collocations and precise terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. Sentence structures are largely simple and often incomplete or fragmented, such as 'To improve the palnt'. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and word order (e.g., 'there are most important than them'). The lack of control over basic sentence construction makes the text difficult to read. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the high frequency of errors significantly impacts the clarity of the message.

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