Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Some people say that the environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals . Other say that there are more important environmental problems
On first hand, there are many plants prople cut . And there make many problems because plants give us oxygen so nowadays plants are very less so oxygen problem is very much much people use place for shelter and cutting trees to make house and many people do not doing dairy farming so they have not real milk real milk made things that is big reason
On other hand some people say there are many other problems like many problems nowadays people use much private vehicle they reduce bad air so they pollute the air and some people use high music they reduce noise pollution and nowadays there are manu factory in our country they do air pollution and also the used water they have no development of water and polluted water and many people doing drugs and throw on roadside and they also polluted the environment and in rainy days there are no have water sollution water stuck on roads and pollute environment and they make many deciese
In conclusion i think make water drainage system and government ban high music and much air reduce factory ban
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both sides of the argument, the ideas are underdeveloped and lack logical depth. The position is not clearly stated in the introduction, and the conclusion is a list of suggestions rather than a summary of the argument. The discussion of biodiversity loss is superficial, and the second paragraph drifts into a list of unrelated environmental issues like noise pollution and drug use, which are not clearly linked to the prompt's core debate.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt to use transition phrases like 'On first hand' and 'On other hand', these are used incorrectly and do not facilitate a logical flow of ideas. Paragraphing is present, but the content within the paragraphs is disjointed and repetitive. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences, making the text feel like a series of fragmented thoughts rather than a cohesive argument. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow throughout the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. Phrases such as 'oxygen problem is very much much' and 'no development of water' are unclear and demonstrate a lack of control over basic collocations. The student relies on repetitive and simplistic language, such as 'many problems' and 'pollute the environment', which are used repeatedly throughout the text. There is no attempt to use less common or academic vocabulary appropriate for an IELTS Task 2 essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'plants prople cut'), article usage, and sentence construction (e.g., 'there are no have water sollution'). Punctuation is largely absent, and the lack of complex structures makes the writing feel disjointed. Many sentences are grammatically incomplete or incoherent, which forces the reader to guess the intended meaning. The high frequency of errors causes significant difficulty for the reader.
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