Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given topic articulates about what are the main causes of the environmental problem. However, there is an ongoing debate in society that they believe the main issue occured from these areas. Some people objected that losing of exclusive species of flora and fauna are the real reason, while other contend there are numerous factors which contributes the alarming state of ecosystem.

Demonstrate the role of plant and animals, several plants species widely known for homes of many animals and birds. Furthermore, they worked as a sheild helps local do agriculture more affectively as birds prey crops kiling inscets and parasites. Moreover, old trees release almost double oxygen to the atmosphere and supports habitat. Additionally, frequent disturbance from human impacts negatively on nature and most of species are endangered.

There are several reason of problems such as fashion industries, massive carbon emisson released by automobiles and use of plastic which has detrimental impact on marine life as well as on human too. Despite this, deforestation of jungles in a substantial amount for building resorts and accomadations for promoting tourism are triggering a major concern for growing issues realted to environment.

In conclusion, both statements are valid on the own place and equally involved demaging the earth. In my opinion, excessive use of plastic and and manmade elements are superiour and loss of rare species impacts partically.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address both sides of the argument and provide a personal opinion, the discussion is underdeveloped. For instance, the second paragraph attempts to explain the role of plants and animals but lacks clear, logical links to why this is considered the 'main' environmental problem. The conclusion is also brief and lacks sufficient justification for your stated opinion. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Additionally', they are sometimes used mechanically or inappropriately, such as starting a paragraph with 'Demonstrate the role of...'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. To improve, focus on using transition words that logically connect your sentences and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly relates to the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that hinder precision. For example, you use 'articulate about' instead of 'discuss', 'sheild' (spelling error), and 'superiour' instead of 'more significant'. There is also a lack of variety in your word choice, with some repetition of basic terms. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation, such as 'emisson' (emission) and 'accomadations' (accommodations).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'factors which contributes'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'losing of exclusive species'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While your meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents a higher score. Focus on proofreading your work to correct subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your sentence structures are grammatically sound.

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