Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
It is certainly true that envinorment is thing which change the atmosphere and temperature which is a crucial role for the life of living organisms.For this reason, it is argued that several individuals tell that the main atmosphere difficulties of our era is decrease of special types of plants and living organisms.another say that there are very crucial seasonal problems.
this is true that it global warming affect the life of living organisms, whereas envinorment is helpful to livr alive for long time like to grow more plants.
On of the point of view i describe that global warming affect the environment like heat waves die the living organisman.In which the temperature is very hot which is not good for animals and especially animals to survive the life. For instance two years ago in punjab pakistan was affected by global warming in which many childs and old persons were died.
Another reason i say that problems are good like more heat temperature kill the dangerous living organisms which is beneficial for the animals lives and plants life cycle. For example we can see climate change is good for some crops and fields.
in conclusion i will say that environmental changes have create their role to affect the living organisms life whereas it may important for some reasones like climate change is good for some crops like like wheat.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the prompt asks to discuss both views regarding environmental problems, the arguments provided are underdeveloped and often confusing. For instance, the claim that 'problems are good' because heat kills dangerous organisms is illogical and lacks sufficient supporting evidence. The student's own opinion is not clearly articulated or sustained throughout the essay. Due to the lack of depth, failure to reach the word count, and the unclear presentation of the two viewpoints, the response does not fully address the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. Paragraphing is present but ineffective, as the ideas within the paragraphs do not flow logically. There is a heavy reliance on repetitive sentence structures and a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas. For example, the transition 'On of the point of view i describe' is awkward and does not effectively introduce a new argument. Referencing is often unclear, and the overall structure feels disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'good', 'bad', and 'problems'. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'envinorment', 'livr', and 'organisman', which occasionally impede communication. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to the environment, instead using vague phrases like 'seasonal problems' or 'atmosphere difficulties'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the errors in word formation are noticeable throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many childs and old persons were died'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and incorrect capitalization. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and demonstrate a lack of control over basic grammatical structures.
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