Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

A part of society argue on solitary topic which is environmental problems such as with time vanished of some plants and animals regularly and other says that there are more important environmental problems exist.

On the one hand, people trusts that environmental issues are rise rapidly because of some particular species of plants and animals are vanished. Which contribute in unbalancing of food chain, as a result some animals are not able to consume their designed food. For example few months ago a complete study by the food and animals department officers in which they described how loss of some various species can cause of disruption in food chain, which ultimately effect environment.

In the other hand some individuals think that apart from extinction there are more important environmental complications such as exploitation of earth for materials and pollution. To begin with the most popular factor is pollution in this time pollution is very more in environment it has been affected so more environment since the industrial revolution also affected water and air both in huge amount. Moving further, the another main factor is plastic which is an recyclable substance this not be degrade in soil and this also not digestive sometime some animals eat this than it also killed them and it also affect environment in large amount this all are the main topic which affected environment in huge amount.

In conclusion, after briefly discussion there i agree with both statements but second statement is an big problem if we correct this than on some place it also protect first statement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding biodiversity loss and pollution are somewhat superficial and lack specific, well-explained examples. The conclusion is brief and lacks clarity in justifying why the second view is more significant. To improve, you should aim to expand your supporting points with more detailed explanations and ensure your position is clearly articulated throughout the essay rather than just in the final sentence.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Moving further, the another main factor'. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, making the flow of the argument feel disjointed. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases more naturally to connect sentences and paragraphs, ensuring that each idea leads logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher score. There is frequent repetition of basic words like 'environment', 'problem', and 'amount'. Some word choices are awkward or incorrect, such as 'vanished of some plants' instead of 'the extinction of species' or 'not be degrade' instead of 'non-biodegradable'. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to environmental science and work on using synonyms to avoid repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('people trusts', 'other says'), incorrect verb forms ('vanished of some plants'), and awkward phrasing ('pollution is very more in environment'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for common errors like articles and pluralisation will also significantly enhance your accuracy.

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