Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that the environmental problem of our time is loss of specific species of plants and animals like Trees, white tiger, flowers and deer. While few individuals have confidence in that there are additional important environment problems.

On the first hand few individuals says that we will loss our specific species of plants and animals. If we see their point of view they are right if plants are not growing trees are not made we see many difficulties like health problems and oxygen problems. If we not have flowers the relationship is not properly working because girl wants flowers from their partner if they don't give flowers to her their relationship is ended. The second problem is that in India's people worship God with flowers. Animals is essential for our earth because animals protects our earth's nature. Government cut the trees of the jungle and became animals homeless. They go on to road people crash them with their cars. Because if they have not forest how they live, environment is totally get polluted by cars, factories 90's people doesn't care about people's health and animal health they only do their work for money.

On the second hand few individuals like Gen z trust in to check the environmental problems like Global warming, deforestation and rising sea level. The modern era of 20's they are well educated and self dependent. The level of global warming is climb rapidly. Earth are fully heated because of global warming if the things are not controlled like motor vehicles, factories Government should ban on these types of products. Because global warming also grow the level of sea which turns into tsunami. Government take action against those people who cut the trees because trees help to reduce the level of global warming.

The conclusion will that we should stop the cutting tress and not destroy forests for their business. Animals will live happily in their home. We should stop using motor vehicles and drop the level of global warming. In my opinion those problems are bigger earth needs animals and plant also because they both save the nature and environment. If environment save the level of sea is go down and global warming also fall.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development is inconsistent. While the first body paragraph attempts to explain the importance of biodiversity, the arguments are often illogical or irrelevant (e.g., the claim that relationships end if flowers are not given). The second paragraph touches on global issues like climate change, but the ideas are repetitive and lack depth. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are not well-developed or academic in nature. To improve, focus on providing logical, evidence-based arguments rather than personal or anecdotal examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and poor transitions. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes incorrect, such as 'On the first hand' and 'On the second hand', which are not standard English collocations. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. The conclusion attempts to summarize the main points but feels disconnected from the preceding arguments. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There is a reliance on basic, repetitive language, and several word choices are inappropriate for an academic essay, such as 'girl wants flowers from their partner' or 'Earth are fully heated'. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'loss' instead of 'lose' and 'climb' instead of 'climbing'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in collocation prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic and precise terminology is essential.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('Animals is essential', 'Earth are fully heated'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which hinders readability. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. The control of basic grammar is inconsistent, and punctuation is frequently misused. To improve, focus on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting more complex ones, and pay close attention to verb tenses and pluralization.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.