Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
it is often argued that, nowadays, we are not able to see the plant and species which are living earliar and it is crucial to find those species. while other says that there are many enviromental problems to work on. In this essay i will discuss both the views and give my opinion at last.
To begin with, There were a number of species, animal, birds and plants, which are not there in the today's time. we are harddly find them in such places like zoos and welfare areas for the animals. we are not able to plant the species which are grew by older citizens.To solve this problem and in the next years we do not have to see thiis type of pandemic in the environment, the crops and seeds were safely quarantied by SBGV - the well known company of norway.They had stored the seeds and crops in the big sized cold storage, which can be survived in next years.
On the Contorary, There are a number of problems occured in the atmosphere. The numer of categories of the pollutions were generated by industries. Firstly, the forest areas were converted into land to build industrial estate. In addition, these industries are polluting a number of factors in the environment, such as air pollution, water pollution, plastics and non-recycle products. It uses non renewable energies, therefore people in urban areas have to seen the shortage of water and other energies. To solve this problrm, authorities have to make strict rules and regulations. For instance, the government of Japan has introduce the rule, people have to sort their home garbage and then put it into the particular bin. if anyone do not follow the rule, they have to pay 200 dollars as panulty.
To conclude, Both views has their own pros and cons, however, i believe that it is very important to solve the environmental problems in today's time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, though the development is somewhat uneven. The discussion on species loss is supported by the example of the Svalbard Global Seed Vault, which is relevant. The counter-argument regarding industrial pollution is also clear. However, the opinion provided in the conclusion is vague ('solve the environmental problems'), failing to clearly state which of the two views the writer prioritizes. The essay covers all parts of the prompt, but the depth of analysis is limited, and the connection between the arguments and the prompt's core debate could be more explicitly articulated to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with', 'On the Contorary', and 'In addition', though some are used mechanically or with minor errors (e.g., 'On the Contorary'). Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the two main body paragraphs and the conclusion could be smoother. Referencing is generally clear, but the overall flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and grammatical slips, which prevents the cohesion from being fully fluid or sophisticated.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choice or incorrect collocations, such as 'living earliar' instead of 'extinct' or 'previously existing', and 'pandemic in the environment' which is an incorrect use of the term. The student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'quarantied' (meant 'quarantined') and 'non-renewable energies', but spelling errors (e.g., 'harddly', 'problrm', 'panulty') and word-choice inaccuracies are frequent enough to occasionally impede the reader's flow, though they do not prevent understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Both views has'), incorrect verb tenses ('are grew', 'have to seen'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization after periods and within sentences. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the high density of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limits the score. To improve, the student should focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement.
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