Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people perspective on environmental changes due to particular loss of plants and animals while on the other hands some are think this is due to environmental degradation. Personally, I agreed with both perspective.

Firstly, change in environment are not happened early because human activities changed over the time. Such as our societies become more advanced and arise of industries leads to particular environmental changes. So we can say by timely changes in human's lifestyle also effected natural environment.

Secondly, the low ratio of wind animals also due to environmental change. Because due to this we also loss much quantity of many species. In past, many plans and animals was living in forest. But now humans cleared much land of forest for land-living. Due to this much natural living things loss their species.

Furthermore, in my opinion is this is true statement environmental degradation is the specific cause of many species. Our societies becomes more and more developed but on the other hands natural weather becoming much negatively impact on both animals as well as human life.

However, many organization work on how mange this situation and save many species. By introduce different progrmanes as well projects world wide.

Many country has following specific atratagies to save forests.

To sum up, due to environmental change is the main reasons to loss oldest species while on the other hands also happened because of our the time. Both are very strong points but second point less impact than first reason environmental degradation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views, but the development is limited and often unclear. While you mention that environmental degradation is a cause for species loss, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The position is somewhat contradictory; you state you agree with both perspectives, but the conclusion suggests one is more important than the other, which creates confusion. The ideas are repetitive, and the connection between human activity and species loss is not fully explored or supported with relevant evidence. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a clear, distinct argument and provides a concrete example to support your claims.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While you use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Furthermore', they are often used to introduce ideas that do not follow logically from the previous sentences. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'due to this we also loss much quantity', which lacks a clear antecedent. The conclusion is also somewhat disjointed from the preceding paragraphs. To improve, focus on using transition words that show clear relationships between ideas and ensure that each paragraph has a single, clear focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'wind animals' (likely meaning 'wild animals'), 'plans' (likely meaning 'plants'), and 'mange' (likely meaning 'manage'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. Many phrases are repetitive, such as 'environmental change' and 'environmental degradation'. To improve, focus on learning the correct collocations for environmental topics and proofreading your work to ensure you are using the intended words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the meaning difficult to follow. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('change in environment are not happened'), verb tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions. For example, 'Many country has following specific atratagies' contains multiple errors in number and tense. The range of structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage, before attempting more complex structures.

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