Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadays, environmental problem is become on species some people believe that the main environmental issue of our time is loss of particular species of plants and animals. others say that there is more essential nature issue this essay will discuss both views and opinions.

Some individuals say that nature issue main on particular species of animals and trees. but it is not an issue of animals. beacuse in this environment so many human beings are destoryed the nature. For example, In our country many humans are enjoying in roads and public places and some individuals after drinking whsiky or smoking destroy that place and roads was damage and it trigger to environmental issue.

Others think that they are more crucial environmental problems because this can cause by bikes, cars. For instance, so many people are using bikes this can lead to air pollution and it causes environmental damage. another point is in this country so many nature issure trigger by power factories beacuse in that company so many individuals are woking by hand this lead by power pollution.

In my opinion, the most of environmental issue by factories, cars and bikes. most essential thing for evry human being do not use plastic.

In conclusion, they both have their opinions and this nature issue not by plants and animals it can cause by power factories, air pollution and bikes cars. that's why reduce electric vechiles and power plantation after less time using we do jot get any health isses we are in safe by environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address both views regarding environmental problems and provides a personal opinion, satisfying the prompt's basic requirements. However, the development of ideas is limited and confused. The student misinterprets the phrase 'loss of particular species of plants and animals' as meaning general littering and human misbehavior in public places, rather than extinction or biodiversity loss. Consequently, the discussion drifts into irrelevant examples about people drinking whiskey, smoking, and damaging roads. While a position is stated, the arguments lack depth and rely on sweeping generalizations and vague assertions about factories and vehicles without clear supporting evidence. This places the response firmly within the lower-middle bands for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is organized into five paragraphs, reflecting a basic attempt at essay structure, including an introduction and a conclusion. However, overall progression is lacking, and ideas jump abruptly between sentences and paragraphs without logical bridges. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, or misused (e.g., 'beacuse', 'another point is', 'that's why'), leading to frequent disruptions in the flow of ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack internal unity and clear topic sentences, making the overall arrangement somewhat disjointed and difficult to follow consistently.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. The student frequently repeats terms like 'environmental issue', 'nature issue', and 'animals'. There are numerous word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'beacuse', 'destoryed', 'whsiky', 'issure', and 'vechiles'. Less common lexical items are attempted but generally misused or poorly collated, which strains the reader's comprehension and reveals severe limitations in the student's active vocabulary range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are almost invariably faulty, resulting in run-on sentences, fragment sentences, and severe punctuation errors. Frequent grammatical errors—such as subject-verb agreement issues ('environmental problem is become', 'roads was damage'), incorrect verb forms ('can cause by', 'this lead by'), and missing articles—cause considerable difficulty for the reader and frequently distort the intended meaning.

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