Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to discuss the prompt concerning environmental problems, but it severely drifts off-topic by writing predominantly about children using smartphones rather than the loss of plant and animal species versus other environmental issues. Furthermore, the response is 223 words long, thus failing to meet the minimum requirement of 250 words, which incurs a direct penalty on this criterion. The student mentions both views superficially regarding smartphone usage, but fails to genuinely address the core topic of biodiversity loss versus broader environmental crises. Ideas are heavily underdeveloped, repetitive, and lack relevant examples related to ecology. Consequently, the performance falls under Band 4 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisational structure of the text is severely compromised. Paragraphing is erratic, with strange line breaks and fragmented sentences denoted by symbols like '→' and 'p'. There is a lack of logical progression throughout the text, and ideas jump abruptly between smartphone issues and family unhappiness without smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or used incorrectly, such as 'lover Moreauer' and 'Mor Additional'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. Overall, the essay fails to achieve a coherent logical arrangement, matching the Band 4 criteria.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is extremely basic and heavily restricted, with numerous non-words, spelling errors, and severe word-choice failures throughout the text. Examples include 'moblie' for mobile, 'puery' for query/purposes, 'entertentment' for entertainment, 'tist' for tourists/teens, 'Unnossary' for unnecessary, and 'carrer' for career. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss abstract concepts, and frequent lexical errors impede communication significantly. The writer relies heavily on repetitive, elementary terms such as 'smartphone', 'good', and 'bad'. These pervasive issues place the performance firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text is dominated by severe structural errors, fragments, and missing verbs, such as in 'Nowadays, Children moblie phone for their puery activ' and 'Spend hours everday on their smartphone very bad it impact bad affect to the children.' Complex sentence forms are virtually absent, and simple sentences are frequently malformed with incorrect word order and missing auxiliary verbs. Punctuation and capitalization are erratic. Errors are so frequent that they constantly distort meaning and cause severe difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 4.

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