Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many individuals say that the significant enviourmental issue of your time is the loss of wild life and nature, while Often says that the eviourmental problem are more important. I beleive that enviourmental problems effects the wild life as well as nature. This essay will discuss the those envoiurmental problems which effect the life of animals and plants.

Categorically speaking, the noise pollution effect the animal life which is cause by the factories or other heavy vehicals. The other main factor is the waste of human life ,which is being thrown into the river causes the water pollution effects the nature. For example in value of polluted air increase suddenly due to enviourmental issues.

Another reason for holding my reason is that individuals should be aware of over hunting which is being the causality of undanger species. The cutting down of trees can be a domino effect of polluted air , furthermore it can also be the cause of depletion of ozon layer. For instance, according to some survey it is clrear that the extension of animals is caused by the overhunt to fulfill the enviourmental needs.

In consclussion, the noise, air and water pollution are the ripple effects of cause by the envouirmental problems. i beleive that the government should pay attention to these circumstances, moreover the individuals should also focus on these situations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing environmental problems and their impact on plants and animals, such as noise pollution, waste, and over-hunting. However, the student fails to adequately discuss both views in a balanced manner and struggles to maintain a clear overall position. The ideas presented are limited and frequently under-developed, lacking specific, well-supported explanations. Furthermore, the length requirement has NOT been met; the response contains only 225 words, falling short of the mandatory 250-word minimum. This under-length issue restricts the full development of the task and directly impacts the task achievement score, resulting in a rating of 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at a standard essay structure. However, the overall progression of ideas is frequently unclear and logical links between sentences are often weak or faulty. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes repetitive manner, such as 'Categorically speaking' and 'Another reason for holding my reason is that'. Referencing is also confusing at times, such as the pronoun shifts ('your time', 'my reason'). Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion does not flow smoothly, leading to a score of 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'enviourmental', 'vehicals', 'undanger', 'ozon', 'clrear', and 'consclussion'. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary related to the topic like 'ripple effects' and 'depletion', these attempts are marred by inaccurate word choice and severe spelling mistakes that frequently impede communication. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for expressing basic thoughts, warranting a band score of 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the noise pollution effect', 'water pollution effects'), incorrect prepositions ('cause by'), and awkward phrasing ('the waste of human life'). These errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader in grasping the intended meaning. Control over punctuation and sentence boundaries is also weak, leading to a band score of 4.5.

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