Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Loss of certain plants and animals species as raised concern in our environment ,some argue that it is the main problem while others believe there are more enviromental problems.I believe that they are also different problems such as deforestration and polution.

Species extiction in the environment is one of the problems since the ecological balance is lost in the ecosystem.However,other factors such as deforestration cotributes directly to the ditrimental effects of weather.Cutting down of trees without planting causes global warming and greenhouse effects.This raises the temperatures beyond normal leading to melting of glaciers and ice inthe artic regions causing fatal floods in other areas.The green house gases on the other hand, depletes the ozone layer making sun rays to penetrate to the surface leading to seriuos disesaes like skin cancer.

Air pollution is another key enviromental problem.Arising from industries that emmitts gases .Acidic gases leads to death of aquatic oragism,corossion of iron sheets and rusting odf metals.This contributes to unconfortable place.In addittion,noise poluttion from congested traffic jams also is a disaster.it releases,poisonous substance in the atmosphere that also hard up to acidic rain and also noise procuded by vehicles.

In conclusion,lost of species is an environmenta lproblem but some people urgue that there are other many important causes.I believe thy are more envronmental problems such as deforestration and pollution

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to discuss both views regarding whether species loss is the main environmental problem or if others are more important, and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For example, while you mention deforestation and pollution, the elaboration remains brief. Furthermore, the response is under the required length, containing only 220 words instead of the minimum 250 words, which incurs a penalty on your Task Achievement score. To improve, you should ensure you fully explore each viewpoint with deeper arguments and examples, while strictly meeting the word count requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay is divided into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is often faulty and mechanical. For instance, spacing and punctuation errors are frequent, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, as seen in 'environment ,some' and 'problems.I believe'. Paragraph transitions and logical progression feel disjointed, and referencing is occasionally unclear. To achieve a higher band score, you need to use cohesive devices more accurately, manage paragraphing properly, and ensure mechanical conventions such as spacing and punctuation are correctly applied.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is adequate to convey basic ideas, but it is limited and contains numerous spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include 'deforestration', 'polution', 'extiction', 'ditrimental', 'inthe', 'artic', 'emmitts', 'oragism', 'corossion', 'odf', 'unconfortable', 'poluttion', 'hard up', and 'urgue'. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader. To improve your lexical score, you need to expand your vocabulary range, incorporate less common academic terms accurately, and pay close attention to spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your grammar displays a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but it is heavily marred by frequent errors in punctuation, subject-verb agreement, and word forms. Examples include 'Loss of certain plants and animals species as raised concern' (grammatical error), 'making sun rays to penetrate' (awkward phrasing), and numerous run-on sentences with incorrect spacing and punctuation. While meaning is generally retrievable, the density of errors impacts readability. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, correct article usage, and reliable punctuation and capitalization.

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