Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In some countries some people problems with particular species of plants and animals therefore that not like it because they people other hobby like and busy in different other things.
Firstly, according to my opinion we not problems with species of plants and animals because that species is the naturals and made for Allah. That people not like for species of plants and animals because they were not like it and busy in different other hobbies. That people more time spend in mobiles and busy in different other digital things therefore that people are hate for natural things because according to that people opinion that say species of plants and animals are bored me therefore some people are not liked. This is very bad things because species of plants and animals are naturals.The species of plants, animals and other there is very important for all in the world for environment because Allah make every things working for every work this is natural.
Furthly, that people consider for particular species of animals, plants and other there are very important for environment this is good men. Because there men like for natural things and other all natural species because that consider there are very important for everyone.
To conclude, Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. In my opinion we should liking for particular species of plants and animals and other natural species. Because this is not effect for environment. This is important for environment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding the loss of species versus other environmental problems, but the argument is extremely difficult to follow due to severe language limitations. The writer mentions that some people are distracted by mobile phones and hobbies rather than caring for nature, and attempts to contrast this with the view that species are important for the environment. However, the position is muddled and repetitive. Ideas are very limited and under-developed, relying on simplistic assertions rather than well-supported arguments. While the prompt asks to discuss both views and give an opinion, the execution falls short of Band 5 requirements in terms of clarity, development, and task fulfilment. Consequently, a band score of 4.0 is appropriate.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organisational structure of the essay is heavily compromised. While the student attempts basic paragraphing, the flow of ideas lacks logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, such as the frequent misuse of transitional phrases like 'Firstly', 'Furthly', and 'To conclude'. Referencing is unclear throughout the text, notably with pronouns like 'that' and 'there' being used incorrectly to refer to people or concepts (e.g., 'That people more time spend in mobiles'). Because information and ideas are not arranged coherently, making it very hard for the reader to trace an argument, the writing aligns best with Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Vocabulary usage is extremely basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on restricted words such as 'things', 'people', 'environment', and 'species'. There are severe limitations in word choice and collocation, demonstrated by phrases like 'busy in different other things', 'naturals', and 'good men'. Spelling errors and incorrect word forms (such as 'liking' instead of 'like' or 'concerned') appear frequently. Because the lexical range is very limited and errors repeatedly strain the reader's understanding, the vocabulary falls into the Band 4 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting primarily of repetitive, faulty simple and attempted complex structures. There is a total lack of control over basic syntax, word order, and verb forms. Examples of severe grammatical errors include 'we not problems with species', 'because that species is the naturals and made for Allah', and 'according to that people opinion that say species of plants and animals are bored me'. Punctuation is also problematic. Errors are constant and frequently distort meaning, which firmly places this response at Band 3.0 or Band 4.0. Awarding 4.0 reflects the absolute minimum coherence of basic clauses despite the pervasive errors.
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