Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
nowadays environment suffers from a different types of problem special with the happening devolopment
people's opinions differ to precize the exactly problems some of them find that a the main problem is the loss of particular species of plants and animals while others find that there are more important problems than those one
in my opinion the main environmantal problem is the pollution because of industries for exemple : here in algeria we have a very significant number of industrial eras such as : el hadjar industry is one of the biggest industries in algeria and it leads to sea's pollution, forests pollution with time people can sweem or enjoy with a healthy nature
pollution is one of the biggest environemental problems that goverments must limit it and unite to find a solution
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping at only 133 words. This severely limits the development of the ideas. While the student does attempt to discuss both views regarding environmental problems and mentions pollution as their own opinion, the ideas remain very underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or extension. For instance, the mention of 'el hadjar industry' touches upon a relevant example, but it is not expanded into a fully realized argument. Because the response is significantly under-length and lacks full task fulfillment, it falls short of the descriptors for Band 5, earning a Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text suffers from a major lack of proper formatting, punctuation, and paragraphing, as it is written as a single continuous block of text without periods or capital letters to separate sentences. This makes the overall arrangement difficult to follow. Although there is a basic logical progression from introducing the topic to stating a personal opinion and providing an example, the absence of basic punctuation and cohesive devices means that cohesion is faulty and mechanical. Referencing is unclear, and the lack of distinct paragraphs prevents any clear structural progression, fitting the Band 4 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The student uses a very basic and repetitive vocabulary, with several noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text. Examples include 'devolopment' instead of development, 'precize' instead of precise, 'environmantal' instead of environmental, and 'sweem' instead of swim. Furthermore, phrases like 'industrial eras' demonstrate incorrect word collocation. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a rudimentary topic, the frequent errors and limited range restrict the score to a Band 4.0, as the lexical choices strain the reader's comprehension.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of run-on clauses linked improperly without any punctuation. There is a complete lack of terminal punctuation, commas, and capitalisation, making it difficult to identify distinct sentence boundaries. Numerous grammatical errors are present, such as 'differs to precize the exactly problems', 'industries for exemple : here in algeria we have', and 'that goverments must limit it and unite'. These frequent errors heavily distort meaning and impede communication, placing the response squarely at Band 4.0 for grammar.
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