Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Te world wide discuss about the real main issue that Threatens the environment over the years, howover there is a part of people believe that the raison of this phenomenol is the loss of particular species of plant and animals whereas some others says that there is perhaphs other causes for this situation .
on the one hand , the nature is created with numerous other things to complet each other and make the envirenemnt more powerful and those things are very necessery for instance animals and plants especially animals due to there kind of animals that make a equilibre in the food chain such as fishs
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response falls significantly short of the required 250-word minimum, containing only 107 words. Consequently, the task cannot be fully addressed, and the ideas presented remain extremely limited and under-developed. While the student attempts to introduce the topic of environmental problems and mentions the loss of species ('the loss of particular species of plant and animals'), the essay breaks off abruptly in the second paragraph before exploring the opposing view or presenting a clear personal opinion as requested by the prompt. This severe under-length penalises the task achievement score heavily, reflecting the descriptors for Band 4 where the task is addressed only minimally.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text demonstrates some basic organisational awareness by using transitional phrases such as 'on the one hand', but the overall progression of ideas fails because the essay is incomplete. Paragraphing is faulty, as the text stops prematurely in the middle of a sentence in the second body paragraph. Cohesive devices are either misused or overly repetitive, such as the clunky repetition of 'animals' in 'animals due to there kind of animals'. Referencing is also unclear in places, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical development of the argument. These features align closely with the Band 4 descriptor, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring frequent spelling and word-choice errors that strain the reader's understanding. Examples include 'Te' instead of 'The', 'howover' instead of 'however', 'raison' instead of 'reason', and 'phenomenol' instead of 'phenomenon'. There are also numerous collocation and grammatical word-form errors, such as 'complet each other' and 'equilibre'. The student attempts some less common terms like 'environment', but the high density of errors and limited range restrict the score to a Band 4, where vocabulary is basic and errors frequently impede smooth reading.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structures attempted are largely limited and heavily flawed. The response consists of extremely long, run-on sentences that lack proper punctuation and control, such as the opening sentence which attempts a complex structure ('Te world wide discuss about...') but fails completely due to multiple structural errors. Errors in tense, word form, and punctuation are pervasive throughout every sentence, causing considerable difficulty for the reader. There is a lack of error-free sentences, placing the performance firmly in the Band 4 category where errors are frequent and often distort the intended meaning.
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