Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, plants and animal become famous in environmental. Many arguments claim that the main circumstance issues of our time is because loss of plants and creatures. While, others believe that there are more enviromental problem. The both views will discuss appropraitely with reasones and examples. I believe that there are more environmental problems.

There are several reasons why people believe that loss plant animals is the main issue of circumstance. One of the reason is because in the city, there are a lot of tall apartment, which make most of the plant and difficult to survive so they can die easily and become rare. For instance, the tree that used to grow near the street become die due to individuals transportation. As a result, it gives polution and the creatures loss of their place to stay and can make them die.

However, many people believe that the public is one of the main reason make problem in environment. They took several thing from the mountain for their importance thing. For example, they bring gun to the forrest to hunter animals and eat the meat for dinner. Furthermore, it can affect the animals such as bird become rare.

Both views have valid points, however I strongly believe that the public is one of the reason make bad environment. For example, In Denpasar city there are huge of plastic stuck in the water near street. It makes the water go up to the street and it cause the traffic jam especially when raining season.

In conclusion, although some residents believe that loss of plant and animals is the reason of environment issue. However, I believe that it is a population who cause this with their bad action.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Siswa membahas kedua pandangan dalam soal dan memberikan opini pribadi yang jelas sepanjang respons, menyimpulkan bahwa kelebihan populasi manusia dan tindakan negatif adalah masalah lingkungan utama. Gagasan diperkenalkan dan didukung dengan contoh, seperti penyebutan sampah plastik di kota Denpasar yang menyebabkan kemacetan lalu lintas. Namun, beberapa argumen kurang memiliki pengembangan dan kedalaman penuh. Misalnya, pembahasan tentang hilangnya tumbuhan dan hewan agak terbatas oleh generalisasi dan penjelasan yang kurang berkembang. Meskipun persyaratan tugas terpenuhi secara memadai secara keseluruhan, kedalaman penalaran menempatkan respons ini secara mantap pada Band 5.5, karena beberapa gagasan tetap terbatas dan hanya dibahas sebagian.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Esai ini dibagi menjadi pendahuluan yang jelas, paragraf isi, dan kesimpulan, yang menunjukkan upaya pengelompokan paragraf yang logis. Namun, progresi di dalam dan antar paragraf sering kali terganggu oleh transisi yang canggung, frasa yang berulang, dan referensi yang buruk. Frasa seperti 'While, others believe' dan 'One of the reason is because' menampilkan perangkat kohesi yang salah dan transisi mekanis yang tidak memadai. Batas-batas paragraf dihormati, namun alur gagasan kurang memiliki progresi yang mulus secara keseluruhan. Penyalahgunaan perangkat kohesi dan kesalahan referensi yang sering terjadi menyelaraskan respons ini dengan Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Sumber daya leksikal terbatas dan minimal memadai untuk tugas tersebut. Siswa mencoba menggunakan kosakata yang lebih jarang digunakan seperti 'circumstance issues' dan 'individual transportation', namun upaya ini sering kali menimbulkan kesalahan pilihan kata dan kolokasi yang tidak natural. Terdapat ketidakakuratan ejaan dan morfologi yang mencolok di seluruh teks, seperti 'appropraitely', 'reasones', 'polution', dan 'forrest'. Meskipun pembaca secara umum dapat menangkap makna yang dimaksudkan, rentang kosakata yang terbatas dan kesalahan leksikal yang sering terjadi mencegah skor untuk mencapai Band 6.0, sehingga sangat sesuai dengan deskriptor Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Siswa menggunakan campuran bentuk kalimat sederhana dan kompleks, namun upaya pada struktur kompleks sering kali keliru dan penuh dengan kesalahan tata bahasa. Contoh kesalahan yang persisten meliputi masalah subject-verb agreement ('plants and animal become', 'the tree... become die'), missing articles ('in city', 'during raining season'), dan struktur klausa yang canggung ('one of the main reason make problem'). Tanda baca dan ketidakakuratan tata bahasa sering kali menimbulkan kesulitan bagi pembaca dan mengaburkan makna kalimat yang tepat. Akibatnya, performa ini mencerminkan karakteristik Band 5.0.

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