Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is very appeared how many problems we have in our world and how it is increase from a decade to another one . however , the environmental issues still be one of priority for many people but it is vary among people it is major or minor problem .

A category of people say that lossing of particular species of plants and animals is a critical problem . It has a huge impact on people and their lifes . In consequense , when plants are damaged , it would reflect on human food and health as human body needs many minirals and based on that we can see how much of our days deseases . in addition , lossing some animals for ever it makes some small animals become with huge amount which has a bad effect on people . we can not see this impact directly but after many years we will found new problems we don't know the cause of it .

on the other hand , other people see the amount of direct problems which humaniry actually has like starving . millions of poor people can't find the basic food , some of them due to that died . in addition , they may live in wild life where also animals live so they don't have a easy life .

overall , it is shown the best way is balance as evwey category of people has their major pro

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only partially and does not fully develop the prompt. While both views regarding environmental problems are touched upon, the ideas remain limited and under-developed, lacking sufficient support and extension. For instance, the mention of starving people and plant damage is kept at a superficial level without deeper explanation or clear argumentation. Furthermore, the response fails to meet the minimum length requirement, containing 243 words instead of the required 250 words. To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to expand their main ideas with more relevant explanations, provide concrete examples, ensure the position is more clearly maintained throughout, and ensure the word count requirement is fully satisfied.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays some organization, attempting to separate different viewpoints into paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are often inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the frequent reliance on basic linkers like 'in addition' and 'on the other hand'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is abruptly cut off mid-sentence, preventing a proper conclusion. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making the logical flow difficult to follow at times. To progress to the next level, the writer should use a wider variety of cohesive devices more accurately, ensure smoother transitions between ideas, and structure the conclusion completely.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for discussing general topics. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, such as 'lossing' instead of 'loss', 'minirals' instead of 'minerals', and 'deseases' instead of 'diseases'. The attempt to use less common vocabulary results in awkward collocations, such as 'wild life where also animals live'. To improve this score, the writer must expand their lexical range, pay closer attention to word formation and spelling, and use more precise terminology relevant to environmental and social issues.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences, while attempts at complex structures are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb forms and tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'It is very appeared', 'how it is increase', and 'environment issues still be one of priority'. Punctuation and sentence boundaries also show recurring inaccuracies, such as missing capital letters and spaces around punctuation marks. To reach a higher band, the writer needs to exercise better control over basic sentence grammar, reduce the frequency of errors, and successfully incorporate a wider variety of accurate complex sentence forms.

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