Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The significant changes is seen in the enivronment but the main issue of the changes in recent times is the loss of species of plants and animals . apart of the there are more essential problems . In my opinion, there are significantly other problems that cause the enivromental problems rather than loss of species . let us diccuss in the essay :

Nowadays , there are more enivromental problems such a pollution , less green forest , global warming , and more . The Pollution is the main issue of the enivroments . Peolpe waste water is inceased day by day , so the clear and fresh and drinkable water is less . Noise poolution is also enlarged thats why there is some loss of birds species . People should plant trees that will help to feel fresh and clean air .

The enivromental issue is not only occur because of the loss of particular species of plant and animals. The loss of some spcies is the part of the nature . People help the endangered species by separate them with others and treat diffrently .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the task only minimally. While the writer attempts to discuss both views regarding environmental problems and mentions the loss of species alongside other issues like pollution, the ideas are severely limited and under-developed. The introduction lacks a clear position, and the body paragraphs fail to provide extended arguments or relevant examples, relying instead on basic assertions. Furthermore, the response falls significantly short of the required minimum length of 250 words, containing only 187 words, which restricts the depth of the discussion and prevents a fuller treatment of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The information and ideas lack coherent arrangement and clear overall progression. Although the text is divided into paragraphs, the internal structure of these paragraphs is weak and disjointed. Cohesive devices are used very mechanically or inappropriately, such as the awkward transitional phrase "let us diccuss in the essay" and repetitive referencing like "The enivromental issue..." and "The Pollution...", which impedes the logical flow of the argument. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas does not create a cohesive or easily navigable text.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, employing a limited range of words that are frequently misspelled or misused. Throughout the text, basic terms contain recurrent spelling errors, such as "enivronment" and "enivromental", alongside awkward word choices and collocations like "less green forest", "People waste water", and "Noise poolution is also enlarged". These lexical errors and the restricted vocabulary range strain the reader and reflect a limited resource that is minimally adequate for addressing the topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting predominantly of simple sentences and faulty attempts at more complex structures. Errors are frequent and often distort meaning, such as subject-verb agreement issues ("The significant changes is seen"), incorrect article usage, and flawed prepositional phrases. Basic punctuation and sentence boundaries are also handled inconsistently, leading to fragmented expressions like "apart of the there are more essential problems". These persistent errors cause frequent difficulty and confusion for the reader.

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