Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

environmental problems occur now a days due to many factors .There are two type of perspective one is agree about the diminishing of some specific plants and animals generics,and some opposes against this hypothesis.

The group that agree with this hypothesis say that there are many factors of environmental pollution but this is a significant factor is the some crucial floral and plant species have been disappeared gradually. It can reduce oxygen level due to with our air that was pure in the past is become heavy.It leads to many health diseases .Many stomach issues also created by this crucial factor.

On contrary other opinion contradict this fact ,other group say that the environmental pollution is created by the burning of fuel in automobiles that is epic role of pollution.Pollution is also caused by thinning effect of ozone layer .It directly effect the air quality that may be effect our lungs stomach and in some cases heart too.

The air quality is pure in rural ares as compared to urban areas. Furthermore the elements contribute in problem of environment is the heavy use of solar panels that are substitute of electricity.It directly attract the sunlight that also damaging the ozone layer.

According to my personal perspective

both parties are correct with some extent the major ingredients of environmental pollution is lack of planting.

Bulk cutting of tree that lead to elimination of some rare species of plants.

There are some endangered animals that are not rescued by us .Government should take against such type of activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on environmental problems and providing a personal opinion, which places it at this level. However, the treatment of the ideas remains limited and under-developed. For instance, the discussion regarding plant and animal species loss jumps rapidly between oxygen levels and health issues without sufficient explanation or support. Similarly, the alternative view mentioning automobile pollution and ozone layer thinning is briefly stated rather than fully elaborated. Your position is partially discernible at the end when you state that both parties are correct to some extent, but the arguments lack the extension and depth needed to push the score higher. To improve, ensure you fully explain each point with relevant examples and maintain a clear, consistent stance throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation in the response, separating different viewpoints into paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the repetitive use of transitions like 'other group say' and 'that' clauses to link ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but some paragraphs are disjointed, particularly the final section where sentences appear fragmented and isolated rather than flowing logically together. Referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact logical relationships between sentences. To enhance cohesion, you should use a wider variety of accurate transition signals and ensure that each paragraph builds smoothly upon the previous one with clear logical links.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic ideas about the environment, featuring attempts at terms such as 'diminishing', 'hypothesis', and 'crucial floral and plant species'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word form that cause some difficulty for the reader, such as writing 'animals generics' instead of 'species', 'opposes against' instead of 'disagrees with', and 'rural ares' instead of 'areas'. You also rely on repetitive phrasing throughout the response. To move to a higher band, you need to expand your lexical repertoire, incorporate less common vocabulary with greater precision, and pay closer attention to natural collocations and correct word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences and basic clauses. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to frequent errors that can cause difficulty for the reader. There are persistent issues with verb forms and tenses, such as 'environmental problems occur now a days due to many factors', subject-verb agreement errors like 'the elements contribute in problem', and missing or incorrect articles and prepositions. Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect spacing around punctuation marks and run-on structures. To improve your grammatical score, you should work on constructing accurate complex sentences using subordinate clauses and carefully check your work for basic agreement and tense consistency.

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