Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the modern world environment becomes very harsh day by day. A few citizen think that the primary impact of this problem face by animals and plants they damage rapidly, But other thinks that tere are other reasons which imapacts on environment.

On one hand, animals and plants are always depend on nature from intially but now a days people becomes new factories, houses and many other things for their daily life usage in jungles. First they cut the trees and plants for this. To be more specific they cutdown the trees and use their wood for furniture and use their daily life usage. and birds live on trees Secondly,

On the other hand, other beleive that problems such as climate change, air pollution and deforestation are more important. in other words factories are increased day by day very speedly they lefts the very harmful gases and they becomes danger for environment.

In my opinion plants and animals are the big problem for environment lose because which is so important for nature they provides beauty to the nature.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two broad positions and give an opinion, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only minimal: the first view is illustrated through tree cutting and birds losing their habitat, while the second is named through climate change, air pollution and deforestation but not explained with examples or consequences. Your opinion that species loss is the biggest problem is stated, but the reason that plants and animals “provides beauty” is too limited to support it convincingly. The response also does not meet the required minimum of 250 words, which leaves little space to develop either side. Explain why biodiversity loss matters and compare it with other environmental threats before reaching a supported conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a paragraph beginning “On one hand,” another beginning “On the other hand,” and a concluding opinion. These signposts help the reader recognise the intended discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is weak: the first body paragraph ends with “Secondly,” but no second point follows, and the final paragraph gives a conclusion without connecting it clearly to the earlier discussion. Some linking is repetitive or awkward, and punctuation around “and birds live on trees” makes the sequence difficult to follow. Develop one main idea at a time, complete each paragraph’s point, and use clear references and transitions to show how examples support your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “climate change,” “air pollution,” “factories,” and “deforestation,” which makes the subject recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make meaning less clear, such as “environment becomes very harsh,” “impact … face by animals,” and “they lefts the very harmful gases.” Repetition of “trees,” “plants,” and “environment” also restricts precision. Aim to use accurate environmental collocations and vary key terms—for example, describe species as “threatened” or “at risk of extinction,” and explain that factories “release emissions.” Check spelling carefully, including “believe,” “rapidly,” and “impacts,” and avoid repeating “daily life usage.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer structures, such as “I think plants and animals are the big problem … because…,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and errors are frequent enough to make some relationships unclear. Examples include “A few citizen think,” “animals and plants are always depend,” and “they provides,” where subject–verb agreement or verb construction is incorrect. There are also problems with articles, tense, and sentence boundaries, as in “people becomes new factories” and the run-on sequence ending “and birds live on trees Secondly.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas with clauses such as “because” and “although.” Use full stops and commas to separate complete thoughts.

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