Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Most of the people have their ten cents that the loss of species of plants and animals is the major environmrntal issue and needs to be addressed , while other are of view that there are other number of issues that environment is currently facing . whereas ; in my perspective environmental pollution , land pollution , water pollution are the major threats to environment.

To begin with , there are two main categories of people , the first one are oppined that species of plants and animals their part in maintaing environment . Firstly , the think , species of differnet plants help digest polltion from the environmrnt , for instance , many species of plants have been installing in pakistan to cop with the environmental degradation . Additionally , animals maintains the beaty of the enironment as they help recyclling the the system og the land and animal chain .

In my opinon , there are other environmental prolems thate are far serious then the loss of species and plants . To begin with , there is the most noticeable problem is land pollution that directly added into environmental problem . The example of antropogenic pollution is worth mentioning here , people throw garbage anywere that triggers land pollution . Furtermore vehicle pollutio comes . All the dahgerous chemicals released by the cars directly interect with the air and pollute the environmrnt . One such evidence is acid rain .

Lastly , i must say that rather than the loss of species of palnts and animals , land pollution volcanic erruption , land degradation are the main environmental issues that need speedy initiatives of solutions .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state your own position: the opening contrasts species loss with other environmental threats, and you argue that pollution and land degradation are more serious. The examples of plants helping to reduce pollution and rubbish contributing to land pollution are relevant. However, the discussion of species loss is brief and some claims are unclear, such as animals helping to “recycle the system of the land and animal chain.” Your own view is also not fully developed: vehicle emissions and acid rain are mentioned, but their effects are not explained, and the conclusion introduces volcanic eruptions without connecting them to the argument. Develop each main point with a clear explanation and a specific, accurate example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate discussion paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. You also use signposts such as “To begin with,” “Additionally” and “Lastly.” However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from species’ importance to plants in Pakistan and then to animals without clearly linking the ideas. Some connectors are inaccurate or awkward, including “whereas” after a semicolon and “Furthermore vehicle pollution comes.” The conclusion also adds new issues rather than summarising the argument. Organise each paragraph around one clear claim, explain it in sequence, and use linking phrases only where they show a precise relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-specific vocabulary, including “species,” “environmental degradation,” “land pollution,” “anthropogenic pollution” and “acid rain.” This shows some awareness of the language needed for the topic. However, the range is limited by repeated use of “pollution” and “environment,” while frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “ten cents” for “two cents,” “digest pollution,” and “animal chain.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “other number of issues” and “speedy initiatives of solutions.” Build a reliable set of environmental collocations and check spelling and word forms; precise, natural phrasing will make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast in the opening and examples introduced with “for instance.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries and punctuation occur frequently. For example, “animals maintains” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “To begin with, there is the most noticeable problem is land pollution” combines two sentence structures incorrectly. Several sentences also lack clear grammatical connections between clauses. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly attached supporting clause, then check agreement and punctuation. Greater control of these patterns would make the argument easier to understand.

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