Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In well developed countries with advance projects, eco friendly environment is decreasing with time. some people beaieves that currrent environmetal problem is accosiated with loss of particulaar species of plants and animal.Moreover , others believe that there are many other reasons are also causing enviromental problems.

The most obovious reason of current environment problems are cause by disturbing habitat of particular species of plant and animals.. cutting and decressing forest land , construting other industrial and home land projects.Many animals totally depend o forests for hunting food and for breeding,they are also decresing by catching and killings by humans for industrial and pharmatical companies. plants also required specific land for growing an d foor pollination.Many plants required specific land for their growing roots ,for instance , coconut plants grow besides seeshores and required mostiure .Now many projects are constructing on these aereas and affecting animals and plants growth.

on the other hands, our ecosystem is also effecting by air poluttion and unfair management system. Many industrial procees required chemical for production of different ojects , food and medicines. by this way creating harful vapoure which affecting air quality. and passing in ponds and causing dangerous sitatuation for marine animals and humans. their is lack of check and balance system in our society which controls crimes ,traffic control,health isssues and surroundings problems therfore ,higher autorities should consider all this problem and creates well balnce systen to tackle all anvirnment problems.

in conclusion , i tottally agree with statement that loss of particulr species loss causing problems nut others reaasons should also ne consider . therefore , well oragonised system and fair laws rules impltting in society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views by discussing species loss and other environmental threats, and your conclusion gives a clear preference: you agree that species loss is a problem while arguing that other causes also deserve attention. The examples about forest clearance, animal habitats, and coconut plants growing near seashores make the first view relevant. However, the discussion is uneven: the second view mentions pollution and weak management, but the effects and relative importance of these problems are not fully explained. Some points, such as references to traffic control and health issues, are not clearly connected to environmental protection. Develop each view with a specific example and explain why it matters; also make your final position more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of the discussion. You also use signposts such as “Moreover,” “on the other hands,” and “in conclusion.” However, some links are mechanical or unclear, and several ideas run together within long sentences, particularly in the paragraph about pollution and management. References such as “all this problem” do not clearly identify which issues you mean. Use clearer topic sentences, divide long sequences into complete sentences, and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports. This would make the progression smoother and cohesion less dependent on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “habitat,” “industrial,” “pollination,” “marine animals,” and “air quality,” which helps communicate the subject. There is also some effort to use less common terms, such as “pharmaceutical companies.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are noticeable throughout and sometimes make the reader pause, as in “enviromental,” “harful vapoure,” and “unfair management system.” Several phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “eco friendly environment is decreasing” and “well balance system.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common environmental collocations, such as “environmental degradation,” “habitat destruction,” and “effective regulation.” Aim for precise wording rather than adding complex terms whose meaning or use is uncertain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including explanations with “because”-type relationships and examples introduced by “for instance.” The main ideas are generally recoverable, but errors in sentence construction and agreement occur across the response. For example, “Many industrial procees required chemical” has an unclear subject–verb relationship, while “plants also required specific land” uses an unsuitable verb form. Some sentences are fragments or are joined with punctuation that does not show the relationship clearly, such as “by this way creating harful vapoure.” Work on complete sentence structure, consistent verb forms, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries. Editing each sentence for one clear subject and main verb would improve control.

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