Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Talking about the environmental problems or that the problems about particular species and plants and animal . Seening the envirnomnet today the people who speak about teh envinpmental problem are saying are right in ther place .Talking abput their own wiews I think that both are right in there place . Lets brain storm over the point of view of people saying the plants and animal species are going to the end .It is absolutely right the most of the plants and aninals are going to an end the species are about to extinct by the change in envirnoment. And talking about the other environomental issued like pollution as air pollution, water pollution , sound pollution and the main is land pollution are both basic problems that are needed to be resolved in time .If not solved may bring the world to its end berfore time .I think that the problems relayed to envirnments are more important than others beacause it is the daily air we breath in and regular water we drink amd the normla areas wher we listen to te un comfertable noice and we eat what is grown on ground amd live on earth which is becoming worse to live over day by day . This is what i wana say on this topic and the main reason behind is the envirnomental changes mayn change the world and living style may become worse to live in the world .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both views and state a preference, saying that environmental problems affecting people are “more important than others.” However, the two sides are not clearly distinguished or developed: species loss is mentioned briefly, while pollution receives a list of types rather than a reasoned comparison. The claim that species are “about to extinct” is not supported with an example or explanation, and your own position is difficult to interpret because you also say both views are right. The response is 242 words, so it does not meet the 250-word minimum. To strengthen the response, explain why species loss matters, compare it with another environmental threat, and make your opinion consistent and explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to move from an introduction to discussion and then a personal view, and phrases such as “And talking about” signal a change of focus. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the reader cannot easily see the essay’s stages. Ideas also run together: the list of pollution types leads directly into a broad claim about daily life without a clear supporting link. Repeated phrases such as “I think” and “This is what I wana say” do not create a clear progression, and the opening is difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, and connect each claim to an explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “species,” “extinct,” and “air pollution” and “water pollution,” so the subject is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors make several phrases difficult to understand, such as “envirnomnet,” “aninals,” and “envirnomental.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, including “going to an end,” “basic problems,” and “un comfertable noice.” Aim for accurate environmental terms and natural collocations rather than repeating general words such as “problem” and “worse.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise phrases will make your ideas clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, for example, “If not solved may bring the world to its end,” and uses clauses to connect ideas. However, sentence structures are often incomplete or difficult to follow. The opening fragment, “Talking about the environmental problems or that the problems about particular species,” has no clear main clause, while “the people who speak about teh envinpmental problem are saying are right” contains an unclear clause structure. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and verb forms, as in “the most of the plants” and “species are about to extinct.” These errors frequently affect clarity. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and verb patterns.

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