Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Enviornment play a crucial role. in recent time, the weather of every country change overtime that destroy human health or animals living style. Today in the rapid world, half generation believe that change in environment is the biggest issue that reuion animals and plants life. On the other hand, some people argues that world face a lot of problems through environment. I firmely believe that environment is a good blessing yet the change in environment destroy everything like health, skin issues, spread diseases all around.

on the one hand, environment is a biggest issue that effect the animal life or plants life. moreover, in recent year unwanted rain and fast wind reuion the animals and plants life. in agriculture side farmers face alot of hurdles during this environment change. Every fields that farmers grow for living is destroy in this environment change. Animals suffered in different diseases and lose their health or die.

on the other hand, people firmley believe that environment change spread alot of harmfull diseases every where. People face many hurdles during environment change. people lose their house in heavy rain and lose their everything. Harmfull diseases after environment change occured for instance,skin issues , eyes sight issues, headache, throat damage, vomoting and so on issues ocuure through environment change.

in the result, environment have heavy impact on human animal or plants lifes. Environment play a crucial role in our life if the environment is good we easily focus on work and doing anything.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You attempt to discuss both views, mentioning harm to animals and plants in one body paragraph and effects on people in the other. However, the task asks you to compare species loss with other environmental problems, whereas the response mainly discusses environmental change and its effects; the specific issue of species becoming extinct or disappearing is not clearly explained. Your opinion is also difficult to identify: “I firmly believe” introduces a general statement about the environment rather than a clear choice between the two views. Examples such as crop damage, animal disease and homes lost in heavy rain are relevant but mostly listed, with little explanation of their significance. The response is also three words below the required minimum. Develop the two positions directly and state which problem you consider more important.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “on the one hand” and “on the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several points are repeated rather than connected into a developed argument—for example, environmental change is repeatedly said to harm people, animals and plants. Linking words such as “moreover” and “for instance” are used, but the relationship between some ideas remains unclear, and the conclusion does not resolve the comparison raised in the task. Improve cohesion by grouping related effects, explaining how each example supports the paragraph’s main point, and using clear references to avoid repeating “environment change.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a range of topic-related words, including “agriculture,” “diseases,” “heavy rain,” “farmers” and “animals,” so the general subject is usually understandable. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “skin issues” and “throat damage.” However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise: “environment change” is used for several different environmental problems, while “hurdles” and “issues” recur without specifying the impact. Spelling errors such as “Enviornment,” “firmely,” “harmfull” and “ocuure” also reduce accuracy. Choose precise terms for the problems being discussed, such as species loss, extreme weather or habitat destruction, and check spelling and natural word combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer constructions, including “People lose their house in heavy rain and lose their everything,” and the basic meaning can generally be followed. However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent. Examples include “Environment play” instead of a singular verb form, “the weather … change” instead of “changes,” and “Every fields … is destroy,” where number and verb forms do not agree. Articles and plurals are also problematic in phrases such as “a biggest issue” and “animal … lifes.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention too: the opening has a full stop after “role,” and several sentences begin with lowercase letters. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals and past participles, then proofread each sentence.

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