Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, environmental problem is a big challenge for all the world. some people believe that the main environmental issue is our time loss of different species of plants and animals these people are truely for his opinion.

On the other hand, all countries in the world remove differents plants and make the road replaced of plants. This is a dangerous for all countries. Many people remove there tress and jungle to make housing society and doing his bussiness. These things is make the environment problem and produce different dieases.

One of the biggest environment problem is noise pullution and in all countries involve in this problem. Noise pullution is dangerous for people in this way people not well sleep at home and dusturb different kinds of noise. Many factories remove their chemicals in the air and is dangerous for people the chemicals make cause for different dieases. Transport and other things is very dangerous for environment. In this way all countries in the world face temperature issue.

The example of environment problem is tempreatue issue.All European countries were considered cool in the world in last few months the wave of high temperature in all Europe and people does not tolerance this wave.

In my opinion, all countries should to solve a good solution for environment.

The all countries government to give awareness to people about environment. We should growing different kinds of trees and plants to make the environment good and in this way people save high temperature and save different issues.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You mention both the loss of species and other environmental concerns, including deforestation, noise, pollution, and rising temperatures, and you give a brief personal view that countries should act. However, the discussion does not clearly explain why species loss is considered the main problem, and most of the response focuses on other issues without comparing their relative importance. The opinion, “all countries should to solve a good solution,” is difficult to interpret and is not supported with a clear reason. The examples about European heat and tree removal are relevant, but they need explanation linking them to your argument. Develop both viewpoints explicitly, then state which you consider more serious and why.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “In my opinion” signal a change of focus. However, the ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the opening introduces species loss, but the next paragraph moves to tree removal, followed by several loosely connected environmental problems. The relationship between these points is often unclear, as in “Transport and other things is very dangerous for environment” followed by the temperature issue. Some linking is repetitive or mechanical, and references such as “these things” do not identify precisely which actions are meant. Group related points into a paragraph for each view, use clearer links between cause and effect, and finish with a conclusion that directly answers the question.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “species,” “factories,” “chemicals,” and “temperature,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled choices strain understanding: “noise pullution,” “different dieases,” “tempreatue,” and “truely.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “remove their chemicals in the air” and “make the road replaced of plants.” Repeated use of “problem,” “dangerous,” and “different” limits precision. Build a topic vocabulary for causes and consequences, and check spelling and collocations. For example, use “release chemicals into the air” and “clear land for housing” to express your ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses short, simple statements, with a few attempts to join ideas using “and” or “in this way.” These attempts often produce faulty sentences, and frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms sometimes make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “all countries in the world remove differents plants,” “These things is make,” and “people does not tolerance this wave.” The opening also begins a new sentence with lowercase “some,” while several sentences run ideas together without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one clear subordinate clause at a time. Check singular and plural agreement, verb forms after modal verbs, and sentence boundaries.

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