Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Species plays an important role in environment. Some people say that the major environmental issue of our time is the loss of specific spieces of plants and animals. Others say that there are very important environmental problems. I agree with this statement and I will discuss both these views in detail.

To begin, There are several causes of behind this situation. One of the most important is cutting the many trees due to making the products of paper such as in the form of books and registers. In addition, these products complete the desire of people in the form of paper. Paper is use in the different shapes in our schools, colleges and it would be further demand in our life. Furthermore, many small and old trees are daily using for burning in the form of fire and light. Burning is very necessary in our life. Many animals are die due to not available of grass. When many trees will be cutting on the daily basis so it is a major impact of lossing the species for example animals.

Now I will describe the effects of lossing the species of plants and animals. When many trees are cutting on the daily basis so it is a major impact on the humanity life in the the form of oxygen problems. However, due to lossing of plants we can not proper exhaling. Additionally, the lossing of animals it is a big impact on our daily life.

In conclusion, we should not loss the plants and animals. These species are very necessary in our life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You introduce the topic and state a position with “I agree with this statement,” but the response does not clearly discuss both views in the question. Most of the essay focuses on tree cutting, paper use, and the effects of species loss; it does not explain what other environmental problems might be more important or why. The causes and effects are also difficult to follow, and claims such as animals dying because grass is unavailable are not developed with a clear example. The conclusion repeats that species should not be lost but does not restate a reasoned comparison or opinion. To strengthen the response, explain each view separately, support each with a relevant example, and make your own judgement explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, so there is a basic attempt to organise the discussion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” help signal movement between sections. However, the overall progression is unclear because the essay does not separate the two views in the prompt, and the second body paragraph shifts from species loss to oxygen without developing the connection. Several ideas are repeated, especially the daily cutting of trees and its impact. Some linking phrases are also used mechanically, while references such as “this situation” are not clearly defined. Use one paragraph for each view, connect each claim to its explanation, and avoid repeating the same point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “species,” “environmental issue,” “oxygen,” and “loss,” which makes the general subject recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or collocations make ideas unclear, such as “complete the desire of people” and “proper exhaling.” There are also spelling errors, including “spieces” and “lossing,” and repeated use of “major impact” and “daily basis.” These limitations sometimes strain the reader’s understanding. Build a more precise set of environmental terms and check spelling and natural word combinations. For example, describe habitat destruction, declining populations, or the consequences of deforestation rather than relying on repeated general phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The essay attempts a few longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “When” and “However,” but most structures are simple, and the longer attempts are often inaccurate. Errors in verb forms and agreement appear in “Paper is use,” “Many animals are die,” and “many trees are cutting.” There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence construction, as in “the humanity life” and “the lossing of animals it is a big impact.” These errors occur frequently and sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to interpret. Practise forming accurate present and passive constructions, and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries. Short, controlled sentences will help you express each cause and effect clearly before you attempt more complex structures.

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