Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

some people narrative the main problem of our time we loss some spices and some people narrative that the other environmental loss are much bigger.thats two different narrative of people's and both are true because a lot of spices dying with time because of not proper care of environment of all these spices and around the other factors like hunting of animals for medicine and burning of Forest that's could help decline of these.in medical term we did not care of these spices crossing.and the second narrative is much more stronger than that because we All know environmental population changes the world we loss fresh Air for breathing Day by Day .we didn't focus on forest ecosystem that's destroyed our life in future because about 90 percent oxygen gain from forest and that's the lungs of all the world of all ecosystem

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both views: the decline of plant and animal species, and broader environmental problems such as air pollution and damage to forests. You also indicate a preference for the second view by saying it is “much more stronger,” so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is minimal: neither view is explained in enough detail, and the claim about forests providing “90 percent oxygen” is not clarified or supported. Your own opinion is only briefly stated, and there is no developed example or clear conclusion. The response is also 108 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to address all parts of the task adequately. Develop each view with reasons and examples, then explain your position clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response around the two views, using phrases such as “the second narrative” to signal a shift. This gives the reader some sense of the intended progression. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and several points run together in long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the discussion moves from species loss to hunting, medicine, forest burning, and then air quality without showing how each point relates to the main argument. Linking phrases are limited and sometimes unclear, so relationships between ideas are difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and connect each supporting reason explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “species,” “hunting,” “ecosystem,” and “fresh air,” which shows awareness of the environmental subject. There are also attempts to express more specific ideas, such as animals being hunted for medicine. However, the vocabulary is basic and often inaccurate or repetitive, which can strain understanding. “Narrative” is not the natural word for an argument or viewpoint, and “environmental population changes” appears to be an unclear choice of phrase. Spelling errors such as “spices” for “species” and “Forest” also affect clarity. Build a more precise range of environmental terms and check spelling and collocations so your ideas are expressed accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas using clauses and reasons, for example with “because,” and you try to express cause and effect. However, sentence structures are very limited and frequent errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. In “some people narrative the main problem,” the verb form and sentence construction are faulty; “we loss” also uses an incorrect verb form. Agreement and articles are inconsistent, as in “these spices” and “the other environmental loss.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, with sentences often joined without full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex sentences using clear subjects, verbs, and punctuation.

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