Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It has been observed that the major ecological problem of current era ic endangered species of some flora and fana as well as many other aspects. Here i would be disscussed some crucial challenges in respect to eliminate these severe problems.

There is an opening debate that the most prominent problem of environment is loss of some significant species.Some people says it is draqmatically changes our ecology.As some genere of plants and animals are rapidaly extinct such as Dodo ,Thylamine . Morever, these species are eliminate from nature due to loss of their surviving adaptations. In addition to, it is a huge loss to living system due to lack of precious organisams from ecosystem. As due to high consumption of space people are violently cut forests which resultd in destruction of natural habitat of living organisams.

On the contrary,those in favor of other openion suggested there are some other ecological challenges. There are some other aspects such as depletion of ozone layer,global warming,land sliding,acid rain,smog badly effect our natural environment. Morever, the thining of ozone layer causes skin cancer . Meanwhile, acid rain causes damage of many buildings such as Taj Mehal. On the other hand, global warming is increasing climat temprature to alarming situation.

To conclude that, both these aspects drastically changes the natural pattern of living beings.We should take steps tosave our natural environment from hadardous chemicals. However, I certainly favour both openions farmer the loss of particalar species as well as many other ecological ploblems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both views: the first body paragraph explains the loss of species and habitat destruction, while the second names wider problems such as ozone depletion, global warming and acid rain. However, the discussion is only partly developed. For example, you state that species loss is “a huge loss to living system” but do not explain its wider consequences, and the list of other problems receives little comparison or support. Your conclusion says you favour “both openions,” so your position is not fully clear: indicate whether you consider these problems equally important or believe one is the greatest. The response also falls two words short of the required minimum, so ensure you meet the task length. Develop each main point with a clear explanation or relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The contrast between the views is signalled with “On the contrary,” and “To conclude” makes the ending easy to identify. However, some links are mechanical or unclear. “As” begins a fragment-like explanation after the claim about species loss, and “In addition to” is not followed by a clear object. The repeated use of “Morever” and “On the other hand” also makes connections feel formulaic rather than precise. Improve progression by linking each example directly to the point it supports, and use pronouns or transitions with clear references. A more focused conclusion that restates your position would strengthen the overall flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “endangered species,” “natural habitat,” “depletion of ozone layer,” and “global warming.” These choices show awareness of the environmental topic, and several are appropriate. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent enough to make some phrases difficult to interpret, as in “fana,” “draqmatically,” “organisams,” and “hadardous.” Some collocations are also unnatural: “loss of their surviving adaptations” and “increasing climat temprature to alarming situation” do not express the intended ideas clearly. Aim for accurate, conventional phrases and check spelling carefully. Replacing broad or awkward wording with precise terms such as “biodiversity loss” and “rising global temperatures” would make your argument clearer and more academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer, more complex sentences, for example the sentence beginning “As due to high consumption of space…” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in sentence formation and agreement sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. “Some people says” needs subject–verb agreement, while “these aspects drastically changes” has a plural subject with a singular verb. The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “As some genere…” is not a complete sentence in this context. Work on building complete clauses and checking agreement, articles and verb forms. Use a reliable simple structure first, then add subordinate clauses only when their relationship to the main idea is clear.

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