Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Group of people state that main enviromental crisis of our time is loss of specific species of plants and animals. other think that there are more important population problem. Overall we will disscuss both point and than give my opinion.

firstly, I am going to discuss the community who think that the major problem is loss of certain species like animal and plant. They think they alraedy loss some kind of animal like Dinosaur, A famouse animal which is no longer with us some science tryiny very hard to discover DNA they also discover bones of Dinosaur their is also some cats or birds which is no longer. Some kinda plants also disappear experts try thier best to find in jungles. Human

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response begins to address the view that species loss is a major environmental problem, mentioning extinct animals and disappearing plants. However, it does not discuss the opposing view that other environmental problems are more important, and the promised personal opinion is not given. The examples are also unclear or insufficiently relevant: dinosaurs disappeared long ago, so this does not explain the current environmental crisis, and the reference to scientists searching for DNA is not developed. The response ends abruptly at “Human,” leaving the argument incomplete. The required minimum length is not met, which contributes to the very limited coverage. To improve, discuss both views, state your position clearly, and support each point with relevant explanations and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the topic, and “firstly” signals the start of a discussion. The reader can follow that the first body section concerns species loss. However, the response has no completed development of the other view or conclusion, and it stops mid-thought at “Human,” so there is no coherent overall progression. Connections between ideas are also weak; for example, the move from dinosaurs to scientists searching for DNA and then to cats, birds, and plants is not clearly explained. The opening’s “Overall we will discuss both point” does not lead to the promised structure. Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and connect examples explicitly to the main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of topic-related words, including “environmental crisis,” “species,” “plants,” “animals,” and “experts,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, as in “some kind of animal,” “some cats or birds,” and “some kinda plants.” Several spelling errors—such as “enviromental,” “disscuss,” “alraedy,” and “famouse”—make the writing less clear and weaken control of written vocabulary. Some expressions are also unsuitable for an academic essay, particularly “kinda.” Aim for precise terms such as “endangered species,” “extinction,” and “habitat loss,” and check spelling carefully. More specific vocabulary would help explain the environmental issues rather than merely naming examples.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and a longer sentence, such as “They think they alraedy loss some kind of animal like Dinosaur,” but grammatical control is inconsistent. Verb forms are inaccurate in “they already loss” and “some science tryiny,” while sentence boundaries and punctuation are often missing, especially in the long sequence beginning “They think.” Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in “other think” and “Dinosaur.” These problems make relationships between clauses difficult to follow. The range of structures remains narrow, with little accurate use of complex sentences. Practise forming complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and use full stops to separate ideas; then check tense, agreement, articles, and plural forms.

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