Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is argued by some individuals that in this era, the main and primary environment issue is the disappeared of some particular animal and tree species. While the counter arguement by other that biodiversity is not the only one problem associated to environment some others are also play vital role. In this essay, first i will discuss both the perspectives and then deduce my own opinion.

Proponents of the first viewpoint contend that the loss of biodivesity is the major issue, because in this 21 century many animals and trees are the edge of the extension. As, if it really happens in the future so it can significantly damage the hole eco-system and also affect on human livelihood. Moreover, every animal plays a crucial for suitable environment and runs the food chain. They also have fully right to increase their generation, which gradully decline for the human activities. So it is our duty to save their important life and also prohibted deforestation globally.

Advocates of the second viewpoint maintain that biodiversity is the not only factor which affect the environment, there are also other promblems that should not be ignored such as global warming and shortage of the water in many parts of the world. To elaborate it, nowadays the private vehicles are considerably using by masses. As a result, that harmful gas release by those vehicles directly impact on increasing pollution and contaminate drinking water. Even, for these reasons now weather is also more unpredictable in all seasons. Therefore, remain carbon footprints by humans not only affect biodiversity but also impact on temperature and drinking water.

In my opinion, as apparent from the above discussion that although the loss of some species of plants and animals are foremost problem related to environment . But i believe that global warming and shortage of drinking water are also major culprit of environmental problems

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear overall position: species loss is a major concern, while global warming and water shortages also matter. The first body paragraph explains how species loss could disrupt ecosystems and food chains, and the second introduces pollution and unpredictable weather as wider problems. These are relevant points, but some are asserted rather than fully explained. For example, the claim that every animal has a “fully right to increase their generation” does not clearly show why species loss is the main environmental problem. Your conclusion also repeats the comparison without explaining how you weigh the threats or why one should be considered foremost. Develop each main reason with a clearer cause-and-effect explanation or a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, one paragraph for each viewpoint, and a concluding opinion. This makes the discussion easy to follow, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “To elaborate it,” and “In my opinion” help show the direction of the argument. However, some linking is mechanical, and a few connections are unclear. For instance, “As, if it really happens in the future so” makes the relationship between species loss and ecosystem damage difficult to follow, while “Therefore, remain carbon footprints by humans” does not clearly connect to the preceding sentence. The conclusion also begins with a long, awkward transition. Use fewer formulaic markers and make the logical relationship between each claim and its explanation explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt relevant topic vocabulary, including “biodiversity,” “food chain,” “global warming,” “unpredictable,” and “carbon footprints.” This gives you enough range to discuss the environmental issues, but inaccurate word forms, spelling, and collocations are noticeable and sometimes make ideas harder to understand. Examples include “the disappeared of” for species loss, “the edge of the extension” for being at risk of extinction, and “shortage of the water.” “Prohibted” and “biodivesity” also show spelling errors. Some phrases, such as “major culprit of environmental problems,” are not natural in this context. Aim to learn environmental vocabulary in accurate word partnerships and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and cause-and-effect structures, as in “if it really happens in the future” and “As a result.” However, control is uneven, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and verb forms sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “the counter arguement by other that…” is not a complete, well-formed clause, and “the private vehicles are considerably using by masses” has an incorrect passive construction. In “every animal plays a crucial,” the sentence is incomplete, while “species … are foremost problem” has agreement and article problems. Practise building accurate clauses first, then combine them using subordinate clauses; also check sentence boundaries and punctuation.

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