Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Wheather to essential issue of nature is lead to disappearing of each specific species of agriculture and rare animals, or ecosystem major issues for this challenges is subject of growing debate in modern society. This essay dicuss the both view in depth and i why i completely agree that vanish some delicated species and animals fue to harm of nature by urbanization and fulfilment of human beings.

In this modern era, every individuals more concern about thier ecomonical well-being they do not focus on impact on their physical helath which correspondingly connect with environmnet. During theurbanization, local people who thrive towards employement, which lead to modifie local area which meet lifestyle of modern cities. As a result, revoultionize daily lifes, advocates misled the ecosystem as comapre to economic satisfaction. The disappering of specific species like sparow, elephant and other species easily appear at local region, however lack of food,stay and additionlly need of aminals speciality such as teeth of elephant and leather of wild animals; which lead to hunting more and reduce the number of species,.

Conversly, urbanization and industrial revolution huge impact on everyone's mind to fit as a professional lifestyle. Food cycle is disturbe through the absentisum species which lead to harm other consumers in chain.Toxic waste by indutries which speard in water openlly that lead to death of sea creatures and also deforestation can escaptaion the livestock of animals. For evidence, lions and lepords appreas in local areas for need of stay and hunting for food sources.

At a glance, there are major issues of any coutry which underestimated, while i carefully considereing this matter it like double edge of knife which depends on each other

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to discuss both views: the first body paragraph focuses on species loss through urbanisation and hunting, while the next mentions wider effects such as industrial pollution, disrupted food chains and deforestation. Your view appears to favour the importance of species loss, but it is not stated clearly or consistently; the introduction’s wording is difficult to interpret, and the conclusion does not resolve the comparison. Several points are relevant but remain unclear or insufficiently explained—for example, the examples of sparrows and elephants are listed without showing their specific environmental consequences. To strengthen the response, explain each view directly, develop one or two examples, and state a clear opinion that answers which problem is more important and why.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding sentence, and there is a broad movement from species loss to other environmental problems. However, the progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several ideas are compressed together. For instance, the first body paragraph moves from economic wellbeing to urbanisation, species disappearance and hunting without clearly showing how each point connects. Linking expressions such as “As a result” and “Conversely” are attempted, but some do not accurately signal the relationship between ideas. The final sentence is too brief to summarise the discussion or reinforce your position. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect cause and effect explicitly, and make the conclusion complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “ecosystem,” “food cycle,” “toxic waste,” “deforestation” and “industrial revolution,” which gives the response some relevant environmental language. However, the range is limited by frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices that sometimes make meaning difficult to recover, such as “delicated species,” “absentisum species” and “escaptaion the livestock.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “economic satisfaction” and “fit as a professional lifestyle.” Aim to use familiar environmental terms accurately before attempting more ambitious expressions. Proofread spelling carefully and check collocations in a dictionary; for example, “loss of species,” “disrupt the food chain” and “habitat loss” would express your ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and cause-and-effect structures, but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty, which can make the argument hard to understand. For example, “During the urbanization, local people who thrive towards employement, which lead to modifie local area” lacks a complete, well-formed main clause and has problems with agreement and verb forms. The opening sentence and the final sentence are also difficult to parse. Errors with articles, plurals, subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries recur, as in “every individuals more concern” and “Food cycle is disturbe.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clear subordinate clauses. Check that each sentence has a subject and finite verb, and use punctuation to separate complete ideas.

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