Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the modern era, few individuals believe that, the loss of particualr species of animals and plants is the main problem but some individuals think that the environment problem is main problem ase compare to another. I have both views on this statement and the reasons behind my perspective in the upcomping paragraph.

On the one hand, there are multitudes reasons for loosing particular species of animals and plants. Firstly every animals play equal role in environmental chain to balance nature. if certain species can extinct the balance eco system face negative impact. For example tiger hunt deer and other animals, some of them eat grass some eat another animals taht is called balance eco system. secondly plants and trees provide shelter to birds, animals and insects. Deforestation is a main reason of loosing oarticular species and plants, trees. There for protecting wild lifes and trees is ensential for futue generation.

On the other hand, there are several reasons of environment problem. Firstly the pollution are rise up day by day, 3 type of pollution effect ecosysten water, air and noise pollution it was generated by industries, motercars. these pollution effect daily life of humans and it effect on climate change meelting glaciers, over flow river. These effect on millions of hunam and wildlife.

In my conclusion, i think that, loss of species of plants and animals and environment problem there both are serious problem. I believe that government and every persons take should take acction againts this problem it will decrease slowly but effectivly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views: the first body paragraph explains why species loss matters, while the second discusses pollution and its effects. Your conclusion also gives a position, saying both are serious. However, the opening claim that you “have both views” does not clearly establish which view you consider more important, and the conclusion does not resolve this comparison. Some support is relevant but under-developed: the food-chain example is difficult to follow, and the discussion of pollution lists effects without explaining why these make it a more important environmental problem. State your opinion clearly and consistently, then develop each main point with a precise example and explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in perspective, and the ideas generally remain grouped by topic. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the example about tigers, deer, grass and other animals does not clearly show the relationship being described. Linking phrases such as “Firstly” and “Secondly” are also used mechanically, while “There for” and “These effect” do not connect ideas clearly. Use fewer formulaic transitions and make the relationship between each claim, example and consequence explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “species,” “deforestation,” “pollution,” “ecosystem” and “climate change,” so the reader can identify the environmental themes. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “environment problem,” “loosing particular species,” and “balance eco system.” Spelling errors—including “particualr,” “motercars” and “effectivly”—also reduce precision. Build a bank of accurate environmental collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “environmental problems,” “the loss of species,” and “maintain ecological balance.” This would make your ideas clearer and more natural without requiring unnecessarily advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic complex structures, such as “if certain species can extinct the balance eco system face negative impact.” However, these attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Examples include “every animals play,” “the pollution are rise up,” and “I have both views … and the reasons behind my perspective.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly after full stops and around introductory phrases. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “if” and “which.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms during editing.

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