Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of the plants and animals.Other argue that there are more cruical nature based issuces.This essay will discuss both the veiw before explaning why i believe the human activities are cause damage the nature.Till there is a chance to improve the good environment.

On one hand ,there have various of species like plants and animals . However, today we can see the reduces birds due to facts of air pollution caused by industries . many way are pollutic the nature .Most value thing is deforestation ,human are largly cutting down tree for their own needs.to illustrate the forest have major life style for animals and plants. consequently a well- beings were triggar the deforestation and many species were exited in wildanimals .explore a cats , there were number species like tiger,cheetha and Lion have reduced day by day due to the lack of land.

On the another hand,the climate changes also the effects of species of tress and animals. nowadays we facing the global warming .This warming are occurs by air pollution,water pollution and soil pollution. Predomantly people used plastic materials and rise in wasteage.To instance , some birds are travel the country to country by analysis the session .so uncomfortable weather their are produced wrong crop or food and it leads to damage the cycle of travel and can't handly the weather condition.

In my opinion , I used to say that by my time their is numerios specise are exitance by human activities . To maintain the environment.

In conclusion , the main part of enviromental problem it leads to plants and animals.By pollution and harmful gases release into air .This should prevent by human only.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views by discussing species loss and broader environmental pressures such as climate change and pollution, and you include examples involving deforestation, tigers and birds. However, the discussion is only partial: the first view is more developed, while the explanation of why other environmental problems are more important remains unclear. Your own position is difficult to identify consistently. The introduction mentions human activities, but “In my opinion” is followed by an incomplete thought, and the conclusion mainly repeats that pollution harms plants and animals rather than clearly comparing the two views. Develop a direct opinion and explain why one problem is more significant, using a clear cause-and-effect example. The response meets the required length; 15 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On one hand” and “On the another hand,” and a conclusion, so there is some recognisable organisation. The paragraphs also attempt to group related points, such as deforestation and species loss in the first body paragraph. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the link between climate change, birds travelling between countries and crop damage is not made clear. Connectors such as “However,” “consequently” and “To instance” are sometimes inaccurate or do not show the intended relationship, and the final opinion paragraph is too brief to guide the reader. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, then order supporting explanations and examples logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “deforestation,” “air pollution,” “global warming” and “species,” which helps establish the environmental subject. There are also attempts to use more specific examples, such as “tiger” and “cheetah.” However, the range is limited and errors in spelling, word form and collocation are frequent enough to make some ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “cruical nature based issuces,” “the reduces birds,” “species were exited” and “rise in wasteage.” Some phrases, such as “major life style for animals and plants,” do not express the intended meaning clearly. Build accuracy by learning environmental collocations and checking spelling and word forms; for example, use “habitat” or “ecosystem” where appropriate rather than relying on vague phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure in “it leads to damage the cycle of travel,” and you use some subordination with “due to.” However, the range is limited, and attempts at longer sentences often contain errors that obscure meaning. For example, “This warming are occurs” has problems with verb form and agreement, while “human are largly cutting down tree” has errors in agreement and number. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also unreliable, as in “animals.Other argue” and the run-on sequence beginning “To illustrate the forest.” Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check verb agreement, articles, plurals and sentence boundaries during revision.

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