Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few individuals think that fabricated crime displayed on media is not dangerous activity. Others differ and think that it promote brutual behaviour. I will discuss both these views and give my opinion.

First of all the first side who think that it is not agreesive to show the brutual scenes in dramas and movies and they also think that it is not a bad think to hide that type of clips. The telecision is a way of entertainment. Individuals feel pleasure after watching that type of movies in which the brutual and crime clips involved. it is not possible to make a movie or drama without that type of things. There are also an age restriction involved in the start of very agressive and violented cinema. Movies and series without that type of belongings will not be promoted and famous in future

The other side people think that, this type of agressive movies will promote the violent behaviour. Every child first source of entertainment was a TV or movies so if they watch that type of bad and crime rated sceneson internet or on TV, they will learn that type of activities in real life and also do same aspects that they learn from TV.

Accourding to my opinion, I think that that unreal generated scenes or not very bad material and it is not promoting any type of of belligerent behaviour , because if the movies are out of from that scenes it will not remain enjoying, that type of movies are scource of entertainment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state your opinion, so the response is relevant to the prompt. The first body paragraph explains that violent films are entertaining and may remain popular, while the next says children could imitate what they see. However, these points are brief and largely asserted rather than explained with specific reasoning or examples. The discussion of the first view is also unclear in places, particularly the claim that it is “not a bad think to hide” violent clips, which does not clearly express whether such content should be shown or restricted. Your opinion is present, but its reasoning—that films would not be enjoyable without violent scenes—needs fuller support and consideration of the opposing concern.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding opinion. Transitions such as “First of all,” “The other side,” and “According to my opinion” help signal the stages of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several ideas are placed next to one another without a clear explanation of how they connect. For example, the point about age restrictions is introduced but not linked to whether fictional violence is harmless. Some linking is repetitive or awkward, and the final paragraph repeats the claim that violent scenes provide entertainment rather than drawing the discussion together. Clearer topic sentences and more explicit links between claims and reasons would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “age restriction,” “violent behaviour,” “entertainment,” and “crime.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. Phrases such as “fabricated crime displayed on media,” “brutual behaviour,” and “bad and crime rated scenes” are not natural ways to describe fictional violence. There are also repeated forms of “brutual” and “agressive,” alongside spelling errors such as “telecision” and “scource.” These inaccuracies sometimes make the reader work to understand your point. Build a more precise topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; for instance, use “fictional violence shown on television” and “violent content.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a conditional structure in “if they watch that type of… scenes… they will learn.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent, as in “it promote” and “the first source… was,” while sentence boundaries and punctuation are often weak. The opening paragraph also contains an incomplete or unclear construction: “First of all the first side who think…” Articles, plurals, and sentence structure need more reliable control. Practise building accurate sentences around one main idea, then add subordinate clauses only when you can maintain correct agreement and punctuation.

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