Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Emotions and actions shown on television can influence people's behaviour. Some people believes that the violence portrayed in movies and shows are just a source of entertainment and does not create any harm, others argue that it can encourage individuals specially yound adults to behave violently. I strongly disagree with the second statement, television shows and movies are source of entertainment for everyone and it teaches us a lot about life.

In recent times, movies are showing a lot of violence because this is what people want to watch. Adults knows very well that what is shown in the movie is scripted and not possible in real life. Even if a person tries to do something like that in real life, they will get arrested on the spot. Therefore, assuming that people will get influence by watching fictional violence is not a good thing.

However, there are children and young adults who are vulnerable to this, they can get influenced easily by watching on televison. For instance, if a kid watches a violent movie and he found it cool, he will try to act like that character. It is an another thing that he will look like a fool in other's vision, but he will think of himself as cool as the character. But something like is a very rare case. Every child has someone to guide them about what is real and what is fictional, so it is nearly impossible for a child to behave ciolently just by watching some fictional character.

To sum up all, i would like to say that there are very low chances that someone will get influenced by watching a violet movie and behave like it, whereas it providing entertainment to a wide range of individuals is a whole another benefit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a clear opinion that fictional violence is unlikely to cause harmful behaviour, and you acknowledge the opposing view by discussing children and young adults who may imitate characters. The examples about adults recognising scripted scenes and a child copying a character are relevant. However, the discussion is uneven: the claim that imitation is “a very rare case” and that guidance makes violent behaviour “nearly impossible” is asserted rather than supported, and the harmless-entertainment view receives more attention. Your opening also says television “teaches us a lot about life,” but this point is not explained. Develop both sides with more balanced reasoning and make your conclusion follow from the evidence presented.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding summary. Linking expressions such as “However,” “For instance,” and “To sum up” help readers follow the main direction. Overall, the ideas are arranged coherently, but progression within paragraphs is sometimes weakened by abrupt or unclear connections. For example, the move from a child imitating a character to looking foolish “in other's vision” does not clearly support your argument about whether violence is encouraged. The conclusion also introduces the benefit of entertainment without fully connecting it to the preceding discussion. Use clearer topic sentences and ensure each example directly develops the paragraph’s central claim.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “fictional violence,” “vulnerable,” “scripted,” and “influenced.” There is some variation in how you describe the issue, although several expressions are imprecise or repetitive, such as “source of entertainment,” “behave violently,” and “get influenced.” Spelling and word-form errors—including “yound,” “televison,” “ciolently,” and “violet”—also reduce accuracy and can briefly distract the reader. Some phrases, such as “in other's vision” and “a whole another benefit,” are not natural in this context. Build a more precise range of collocations and proofread spelling so your vocabulary conveys your reasoning more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional forms such as “if a kid watches a violent movie… he will try to act like that character.” The overall meaning is generally understandable, but errors in agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur often enough to affect fluency. For example, “Some people believes” should be “Some people believe,” and “the violence… are” should be “the violence… is.” The opening joins two complete ideas with a comma, creating a run-on sentence; “Adults knows” and “it teaches us” also show agreement problems. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and separating independent clauses with a full stop or an appropriate conjunction. More accurate control of these patterns would make your varied sentences easier to read.

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