Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This is has been under the debate since very long time that the fictional violence demonstrated on the television is harmlees or that it may have negative impact and reinforce the violent behaviour among the children and adults.

The people with opinion that fictional violence is harmless have their own ideas; to support their statement. The fictional cartoons and movies shows the violent behaviour but it is funny to some extent and as it is fictional so the effect of that violence is not of the greater impact on the viewer mind set. The cartoon character are sort of entertainment and if the violence is depicted there is some sort of lesson in it as the purpose of fictional characters are to convey message.

However the fictional violence can be the source of anger issues in some of the children as if they watch the violent fictional scenes it reinforce their brain to develop that kind of atttiude and there are numerous children who are soo addicted to cartoons and fictional characters that they have no sense of differentiation between reality and fiction which thus; results, in the violent behaviour and other temperament issues.

In conclusion , fictional violence is not harmless it has some kind of negative impact on the behaviour and upbringing; of the growing children it is the responsiblity of parents to limit the screen time of their children and if they notice any signs of violent behaviour they should consider restricted them and there should be balance between what children watch as they learn what they see.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You discuss both positions: fictional violence is presented as entertaining and potentially instructive, while the opposing view links it to anger and children copying what they see. Your conclusion also gives a clear opinion that it can have negative effects and recommends parental limits. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The harmless-entertainment argument relies mainly on cartoons being funny and fictional, without a specific example or explanation of why viewers can distinguish fiction from reality. The concern about children is more developed, but claims such as “numerous children” are broad and unsupported. To strengthen the response, explain each view with a concrete example and make your own position explicit earlier, then support it consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an opening, a paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. “However” signals the shift to the opposing argument, and “In conclusion” makes the ending easy to identify. Nevertheless, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the second paragraph moves from cartoons being funny to their possible lessons without clearly explaining the relationship. The final sentence also combines parental responsibility, restricting viewing, and balance without clear separation. Use shorter sentences to develop one main point at a time, and make links between claims explicit rather than relying mainly on basic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “fictional violence,” “violent behaviour,” “anger issues,” “screen time,” and “differentiate between reality and fiction.” These choices make the main subject clear, and there are attempts at more specific expressions such as “temperament issues.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or combinations are inaccurate or awkward, which can make the meaning less precise. Examples include “greater impact on the viewer mind set,” “reinforce their brain,” and “restricted them.” Spelling errors such as “harmlees,” “atttiude,” “soo,” and “responsiblity” also weaken control. Build a wider set of accurate collocations and check spelling carefully; for instance, use “influence children’s attitudes” rather than “reinforce their brain.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “as,” “if,” and “that,” but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to read. The opening, “This is has been under the debate since very long time,” contains problems with verb form and article use. In “The fictional cartoons and movies shows,” the subject and verb do not agree, while “the cartoon character are” has the same issue. The final sentence contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation, making the relationships between ideas hard to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and use complex clauses only when you can control their structure.

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