Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some individuals think that the fictional violence showed on television is safe entertainment. Others deny and think that it encourages violent behaviour. Discussing both these views below-

In my perspective, television contents may be harmful or not. However, mostly the media channels share violent and dangerous news that might harm the mental state of people. This types of news can be wild and it can create fight between two groups of people. Moreover, today television is not the only method we can get entertainment but also we can be cheerful by using social media such as facebook, tiktok, youtube etc. through mobile phones. As of this generation, people are running for views, trp, and money and they do not hesitate to share if this information can be conflicting or not. Whether, the destruction happens after these false news can be vital. For example, we can eradicate these problems by taking some serious measures. The government should impose fines and punishments for those people who are doing these dirty acts that spread misunderstanding to the general people through television entertainment.

On the contrary, some contents of televsion are educational and moral learning. People take good lessons from these scenes. The educational and informative channels like peace tv, national geography, kids moral teach us survival in the hardest situation, peace over war and life lessons. Although, the childrens can see the cartoon that teach them morality, religion, career building contents. However, the fictional violence some times can be good as it helps us all to be safe and sucure from unwanted dangers. For the best situation, the parents must teach the kids what is good or bad and they should have control over the content watching of the childrens.

As to conclude, portraying violence content has both pros and cons. Though, it is our moral duty to learn good things from them over the violence one. Because, every action has an opposite and similar reaction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You introduce both views and give a general position that television content “may be harmful or not,” then conclude that it has “both pros and cons.” However, the discussion does not consistently address the specific issue of fictional violence. Much of the first body paragraph shifts to false or dangerous news, social media, and government punishment, which are not the central subject of the prompt. The second paragraph offers relevant points about educational content, children, and learning to stay safe, but it does not clearly explain how fictional violence might encourage violent behaviour or why others consider it harmless entertainment. Develop each side directly with a clear example and state your own view more decisively.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. The contrast marker “On the contrary” also signals a shift to the second view. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first moves from television violence to news, social media, government penalties, and then back to entertainment, making the central argument difficult to follow. Several linking expressions are awkward or do not show the intended relationship, including “Whether” and “Although” at the start of sentences. The conclusion repeats the general pros-and-cons idea rather than drawing together the arguments. Organise each body paragraph around one view, and use clear topic sentences and references to connect supporting examples to that view.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “violent behaviour,” “educational,” “moral,” “survival,” and “unwanted dangers,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or imprecise. For example, “fictional violence showed on television” is less natural than “fictional violence portrayed on television,” while “wild” does not clearly describe the effect of news in this context. “Dirty acts” is informal and vague for an academic essay, and “television contents” is an unnatural phrase. Spelling errors such as “televsion,” “sucure,” and “childrens” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, formal expressions and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses with “that,” “although,” and “as,” but complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the argument harder to follow. Examples include “This types of news,” where the demonstrative and noun do not agree, and “the childrens can see the cartoon that teach them,” which has problems with plural forms and subject–verb agreement. The sentence beginning “Although, the childrens…” is also not properly connected to a main clause, while “As to conclude” is not a correct concluding construction. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are sometimes awkward. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement, articles, and clause completeness.

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