Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued among people that whether violence shown on televison for entertainment purpose is harmless or does it stimulates to act in a violet manner. In my opinion it is not as harmless at it seems rather it drives people to act in a violent way.

On one hand, television programmes are made to entertain people and it nedds variety of elements to be show, otherwise it won't capture audience attraction. One such element is violence where the hero and villain are often shown to have a fight or violence shown in war which might be a mandatory part of the drama. We all know that such entertainment if fake but some people specially children might think differently.

On the other hand, if a child starts to imagine himself fighting the scenes shown in TV, he might want to replicate such behavior in the real life as well. It will get him into trouble frequenty at schools and social gatherings. As due to hitech digital technology the violent scenes and fighs seems to be more realistic than before, it stimulates the mind in a more negative way. This sort of behavior if persists, will lead harm to others and the person pefroming violence as well. Seeing too much violence on television also enables to focus and concentrate, which will reduce study quality and might result in academic failure. Violence on television needs to go under scrutiny before it is on arir and parents needs to monitor television programmes as well.

In conclusion, no matter how important it is to show violence on television, a srtrict monitoring system should be implimented to reduce the violence and parents at home should also take a conscious decision regarding what sort of content should their children watch.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a clear opinion that television violence can encourage harmful behaviour, and you include both views: entertainment may require dramatic conflict, while children may imitate what they see. These points are relevant, but the discussion is only partly developed. The harmless-entertainment side is mainly explained as a production choice, without showing why viewers might safely distinguish fiction from reality. The argument about imitation is more developed, but claims about reduced concentration and academic failure are introduced without explanation or an example. To strengthen the response, explain each side more fully and support the main claims with a specific, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction states your view, the two body paragraphs present opposing arguments, and the conclusion returns to your position. The signposts “On one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow this structure. However, connections within paragraphs are sometimes mechanical or unclear. For example, “As due to hitech digital technology” does not clearly link the preceding idea to its consequence, and the shift from imitation to concentration and academic failure feels abrupt. Some references, such as “This sort of behavior,” could identify more precisely which behaviour is meant. Use clearer links between claims and explain how each supporting point relates to the paragraph’s main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “violent behaviour,” “replicate,” “realistic,” and “scrutiny,” so the reader can understand the main subject and your position. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the response less clear or natural. Examples include “televison,” “violet manner,” “capture audience attraction,” and “needs to go under scrutiny.” Some wording is also imprecise, such as “enables to focus and concentrate,” which does not clearly express the intended effect of watching violence. Build a more accurate set of topic phrases and check spelling and natural word combinations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if a child starts to imagine himself … he might want to replicate” and a relative clause in “which will reduce study quality.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “It is often argued among people that whether…” combines incompatible structures, while “parents needs to monitor” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. The sentence beginning “As due to…” is also grammatically incomplete, and “Violence on television also enables to focus” lacks a clear subject for “focus.” Practise building accurate clauses before adding more complexity, and proofread agreement and sentence boundaries.

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