Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some people argue that presenting violence on televesion does not have bad consequences others are of the view that it can promote extreme behaviour. While both sides present valid arguments, I believe that such type things should not be casted on televisions due to its negative impacts on people and the society.

Those who advocate for such type of entertainment argue that it is one of the ways to highlight the dark realities of the socities and draw attention towards a non acceptable behaviour by presenting such type of people as villans. Some media person always try to make movies or films about people who disrupts their community with their crimes and give them a painful end to make people learn not to become like them. However, this approach often encourages more violent behaviours because the more a thing is shown to people the more they get comfortable with it.

On the other hand, broadcasting these fictional movies often give rise to a more negative behaviour. These type of films are mostly watched by the youth who are at that stage of their life in which they tend to incorporate the ideas with which they are fed. Most of films often present the villan as a hero by attributing their crimes with their childhood trauma or the society that forced him to do so. Consequently, the young people copy their behaviour and sometimes they like to see people in pain. Their mental states get affected negatively and they take wrong decisions in their life. For example, during financial hardships they could become robbers or even murderes only to get some money.

In conclusion, while such type of stories shown to people may bring the hidden realities of communities into light but its impact on the people and the society outweights its advantages and I believe these things should not be made available to people on their screens.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both views and make your own position clear: you acknowledge that fictional violence can expose social problems, but argue that its harmful effects outweigh this benefit. The explanation that violent characters may be presented sympathetically, followed by the example of young people copying them, is relevant to the question. However, the two sides are not developed equally. The harmless-entertainment argument is mainly framed as raising awareness, rather than explaining why viewers might enjoy fiction without imitating it. The claim that young people could become robbers or murderers during financial hardship is also asserted rather than supported, and the link to television is not fully established. Develop each view with a clearer explanation and a specific, plausible example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion that restates your opinion. The progression from the possible educational purpose of violent films to their potential influence on young viewers is generally easy to follow. Some connections, however, are mechanical or unclear. For example, “However” introduces a counterpoint within the first body paragraph, but the shift from the argument about awareness to the claim about normalisation could be explained more explicitly. Repeated phrases such as “such type” and “these type” also make the links between ideas feel repetitive. Use more precise referencing and vary transitions, while ensuring each paragraph develops one main point in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “dark realities,” “incorporate the ideas,” “childhood trauma,” and “financial hardships,” which helps communicate the main argument. There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems that reduce precision, such as “televesion,” “socities,” “villans,” and “murderes.” Several expressions are awkward or imprecise, including “such type of entertainment,” “non acceptable behaviour,” and “painful end.” Choose more natural collocations, for example, “this kind of entertainment,” “unacceptable behaviour,” and “a severe punishment.” Proofreading spelling and checking whether phrases sound idiomatic would make your vocabulary more accurate and flexible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including a concession in “While both sides present valid arguments” and a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “Consequently.” Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “These type of films” should be “This type of film” or “These types of films,” and “people who disrupts” needs subject–verb agreement (“people who disrupt”). In “the more a thing is shown to people the more they get comfortable with it,” punctuation is needed between the two clauses. There are also errors in constructions such as “its impact … outweighs its advantages,” where the subject and verb need to agree. Review agreement, singular/plural forms, and punctuation in longer sentences.

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