Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · IELTS Momentum Workout · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people think that the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment. Others disagree and think that it encourages violent behaviour.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
People have different opinions regarding the fictional violence portrayed on TV is harmless entertainment. While other belived that it encourages the violence behaviour.Both perspective will be discussed in this essay.
Some people are of the opinion that the fictional violence shown in TV is harmless entertainment because it just based on the story and all the characters shows and all the method used in it are fictional which are shown to just entertain the audience and make that play more real and relaistic. And also they think it will be save because all the weapons and fight are shown is not real and nobody is harmed during the recording.
On contrast, Other people think its not secure and good to show the violence on Television because people get know the new method of violence and how they used these tricks in their crime by learning from them.Like watching drama serials that are based on the Crime base which shows the different scenios and crime sceans commited by the criminals during their crime. Some people learn from them and thatswhy it is consider to be dangerious.
In my opinion, the fictional violence portrayed on television is harmless entertainment because they just shows the story of someone that is already happened in real life and we need to learn from them how we can protect ourselfs or others from that situation If we face such type of situation we have that idea . And also the violence shows on TV is not real. And all the people who played in that drama is fictional and take place under the seniors presence,Firstly, All the safety cautions meet then they perfoam that stunt under stunt supervisors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses both views and gives a clear personal preference: fictional violence is described as entertainment, while the opposing view is linked to viewers learning criminal methods. The examples about crime dramas and stunt supervision are relevant. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The claim that fictional violence is harmless because it is staged does not fully answer whether it could influence viewers, and the final opinion relies mainly on the fact that actors are protected during filming. The point about learning to protect oneself is also asserted rather than explained with a specific example. Develop each side with a clearer reason and supporting illustration, and make the conclusion directly weigh the possible influence on audiences against the entertainment value.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a paragraph stating your opinion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of the response. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, particularly in the first body paragraph, where the explanation moves from fictional characters to weapons and recording safety without a clear link to audience effects. Connectors are also limited or awkward: “On contrast” and “And also” do not guide the argument naturally, while “Firstly” appears late in the final paragraph and does not introduce a developed sequence. Use clear topic sentences, link each supporting point explicitly to the paragraph’s main claim, and use a small range of accurate transitions and referencing.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “fictional violence,” “weapons,” “crime,” “criminals,” and “stunt supervisors,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, sometimes making the meaning less clear. Examples include “violence behaviour,” “not secure,” “crime base,” and “safety cautions meet.” There are also noticeable spelling errors such as “relaistic,” “scenios,” “dangerious,” and “perfoam.” Aim for more precise expressions such as “violent behaviour,” “unsafe,” “crime dramas,” and “safety precautions are in place.” Proofreading spelling and choosing natural collocations would make your ideas easier to follow.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example, “because it just based on the story” and “because people get know the new method of violence.” However, these attempts are often faulty, and many sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, or sentence boundaries. For instance, “all the characters shows” should use a plural verb, while “all the weapons and fight are shown is not real” has an unclear structure. The opening also joins a sentence fragment to the next idea, and punctuation is inconsistent, especially around “Firstly.” These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.
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